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At the Drive-In

At the Drive-In

A Story by ali


No no no No no no

A Poem by ali


Cave in Cave in

A Poem by ali


Suburbs Suburbs

A Poem by ali


Shadowbox Shadowbox

A Poem by ali


Summerless Summerless

A Poem by ali


Late January Late January

A Poem by ali


Lake of Fire Lake of Fire

A Story by ali




About Me

I break everything electronic



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Posted 6 Years Ago


Thank you for the read!

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Thank you for the thoughtful review. I did not mean for flesh and perfect to have the same vowel, which I know most would not admit to but I love it when things "accidentally" come together as such. Like when people in every day life accidentally rhyme...it thrills me every time. I swear I didn't mean to do that : )

Btw, that relationship did not end in always. He is afraid of that word too.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Thank you. I think subtlety is only found in my writing. I lack it in every day life. which I prefer.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Thank you Ali, for coming back and showing me what you saw; when my head clears a bit I will delve into what you have suggested. I can see that those words are kind of cliché, but that is how one feels, or at least that is how I felt at the time. Wow, it is hard to stay original, isn't it? .lol. Thank you again!

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Thank you for the read and review Ali! Let me know what lines you are thinking about? I am always up to hearing advice from a fellow writer. Really thank you for the taking the time!

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Ha ha, no worries, I have a trucker's mouth as well. lol.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Thanks for the read and review, and the great catch on the spelling...I appreciate the constructive review...

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Well I used to in my younger day. lol. Not something I am proud of, but figured it would give your piece more authenticity, so I decided to share:) You are a very good writer, and I enjoy what I have seen of your writes; Keep up the good work!

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Posted 6 Years Ago


you should..your s**t owns...
for really real

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Posted 6 Years Ago


take yer time dear, I just have more free time on my hands than most. Always apleasure reviewing your stuff.

HA. i laughed when I wrote it actually. Saying, gee what a silly goose I am
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