Show, Don't Tell - HANGOVER December 21, 2013 - January 31, 2014
TELLING SENTENCE: He’d drank too much the night before.
How many different ways can you SHOW me that he drank too much the night before?
Show me through physical sensations, actions, behavior, posture, facial expression, dialogue, thoughts etc
Write only a sentence if you will. Make a list of sentences. Mix everything into a few paragraphs if that is what you want to do.
The more ideas you come up with, the better your chances to win. The better those ideas are, the better you chances are.
Tell: He’d drank too much the night before.
Show: His head throbbed, his mouth tasted sour and his stomach turned with a bleating pain that shuddered into the recesses of his bowels.
Created Dec 21, 2013