Forum Poetry Requesting Reviews for a Unique Piece

I am going to blend my verse Tears of Remorse:  http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/doodler222/937482/ 

But - I am going to Illustrate it (Story board link at bottom of the page) and I have selected music (link at top of that page) - and gained permission from the musican to use it.

I wanted reviews, if any of you would wish to take the time to give me input. I want this tribute to the little girl to be... perfect.

>> Please, click the link at the top to open in a new window, and listen as you read. The story board is what I imagined as I wrote.

I wanted to add that I wrote with the imagry in my mind of her running round and round (outside) - but I needed to leave her in a wonderful place. I wrote what I felt she would be saying - thinking as she ran. Pleading.

 I used to be, so very long ago, a professional illustrator (realism). Doing this piece will bring all of my talents into play and for some reason.. I am very afraid and am not sure why.

Thank you ~

Debbie Lyn Jones :)