Forum Test-Out-Your-Work I'm new! Review my writing? Pretty please?

I know there are a gazillion of these posts, but if someone could please review my writing, I'd really appreciate it :-) It's just a prologue- not very long!

 How can I do a writing?:(

 

 

 

 

 

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