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hi. so anyways, i have 2 books i started and I think people are reading it, but seem bored. I hated the third chapter in my Alter Ego series so i'm probably going to remake it. I made it all just jumbled up and it was a mess. My problem is I don't get too much feedback from anyone, making me wonder my my stories are so bad. I usually convey my imagination through deep story through video games. yes, video games. I'm a new writer and all I need is experience, but I can't get better if no one tells me what sucks. so please look at my writing. I'm probably the millionth person to ask but if you're bored follow these two links. One's a pure science fiction (Mother Earth) and one's about what teenagers really go through at this time period and some play on the definition of Alter Ego (Alter Ego).