I'll Review You, If You Review Me Forum Need alittle Help Please

I'm writing a book on teenage problems (like not fitting in, hates to be alone, fears rejection) and I decided to come up with a theme and genre, as Fantasy. The plot goes around Five humans tried to find who they are, while trying to keep the world safe from demons and other beings.   Can you read my book "Against the World"? Its not that long yet, I'm on the 2 second chapter.  I need help, and I need your opinons on it so I know this isn't a complete waste of time writing it, even through I enjoy writing it now.