Within the mind of M. R. Robinson Forum When Hell Freezes

Well,  I don't know if anyone checks my group on a reoccuring basis, but I have a question for you all, my readers....

The question is concerning the novel/novella attempt so titled: When Hell Freezes.

I've got prologue thru Chapter 4 posted.  My question is following the storyline, the developments or character in the second have of chapter 4 known as Tiffiny, is adding her kind too much, okay, not enough, changing the story too much...opinions please  I wanna know.

Thanks ya'lll