Writer's Fan-Fic Realm Forum Reviewing

Alrighty then. Who wants their work reviewed? I'll review then all and give the best feedback I can!

I would like for any of them stories/novels reviewed, please. :)
If you submit your writing into the group, I can then circle the features and everyone can get a chance to get their story reviewed. :)
Sylvia.

I am looking for some constructive critique on the chapters I submitted.  Sorry as I'm new I was un familiar with the process and uploaded 3 chapters instead of 1.   Thanks Neal