Watch Me

Watch Me

A Poem by {A}shley {B}lack @-;-
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You figure it out

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Watch me

How I dance and move to nothing
Watch me
smile and batter my eyelashes seducing you
Watch me
turn a bound hand flexing my finger for you to come closer
Watch me 
tilt my head a blanket of ivory locks on my shoulder
Watch me
slowly blink bite my full lip purr behind the glass
Watch me 
turn to give you a view of the goods that you could explore

Enter

Hold fast maintain a steady course
Watch me 
undress from lace and draw curtains
Watch me 
saunter towards your raging fire
Watch me 
take to my knees 
Watch me 
writhe under your closed hands
Watch me 
struggle for breath and consciousness
Watch me
slip a tear as I gasp my last breath

Leave

The curtain drawn another victim of red light heaven  

© 2017 {A}shley {B}lack @-;-



Author's Note

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
Let me know what you think need to get back in to the swing of things

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The beginning stanzas are very seductive. It calls to mind an image of a sultry temptress unleashed, who wants to unleash their lovers wild side. The only thing I would change is the very last line. It breaks the lovely flow of the poem as it is entirely different from the rest of the lines. I would consider finding a different way to work that into the poem- perhaps create another verse with that separated into two parts in it? As it stands it is very harsh.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Lovely evocative poem which seduces with every stanza.
Beautifully flowing with rhythm like a Latin tango.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Cyber Chic

1 Week Ago

Oh I see what you mean,I can completely understand and know where you're coming from.For me I feel t.. read more
{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

1 Week Ago

I completely agree what your saying its definitely a generation thing what I wrote about 10 years ag.. read more
Cyber Chic

1 Week Ago

Ok I definitely consider your kind suggestion and yes it always rains in the Emerald Isle lol.
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Added on November 5, 2017
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{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

Sheriffhales, Shropshire , United Kingdom



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I Am Ashley Black (an alter ego ) I have a dark mind when it comes to my poetry as the strongest emotions come from negative RETURNING- I have been distant from this site for a while but I am fina.. more..

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