Answers for Love

Answers for Love

A Poem by {A}shley {B}lack @-;-
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A poem about love

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Answers For Love

You fall, I pick you up

you're in darkness, I will be your light

You tell me you love me 

I will be your heartbeat

You cry

I will wipe away your tears

Your frightened 

I will scare away your fears

You wish for death

I will be your blade

You wish for life

I will be by your side

never forget about the past

never live for the future

accept time for what it is

for what we can make of it

for who we are because of it

just know that I don't think I love you

I know I am in love with you

hold your breath 

close your eyes

listen to my voice

now picture me

hold me close

kiss my lips

hear me whisper 

"Forever"

© 2011 {A}shley {B}lack @-;-



Author's Note

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
A poem based on what we do for love please be honest as always

Thank you for reading you guys keep me writing

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I loved like this once before, and it can be as beautiful and unforgiving of a love as it can be divine. When I read this poem it forced me to recall those memories. It's funny that you say you'll be their knife, but sometimes they are yours.
My favorite line was, "You tell me you love me, I will be your heartbeat." That is love. Being everything and giving everything you can, so that it comes to pass that your very heart is beating for them. All you need is even a little hope from them that they do love you.
I disagree with other critiques on here. For such a raw emotion you have to keep things simple. That is how the true beauty is allowed to shine. One of the most famous love poems is the most cliched and simple one can get. "How do I love you, let me count the ways." That is some cheesy s**t lol. So, don't worry about your poem being too simple. It is simple because love is an emotion that readily expresses itself, and you captured that. Good job :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

2 Weeks Ago

Kayla your reviews are always welcome and I love how you just get it! the meaning and the emotion th.. read more



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i love this and I'm a sucker for love, pure emotion and great deliverance!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


I loved like this once before, and it can be as beautiful and unforgiving of a love as it can be divine. When I read this poem it forced me to recall those memories. It's funny that you say you'll be their knife, but sometimes they are yours.
My favorite line was, "You tell me you love me, I will be your heartbeat." That is love. Being everything and giving everything you can, so that it comes to pass that your very heart is beating for them. All you need is even a little hope from them that they do love you.
I disagree with other critiques on here. For such a raw emotion you have to keep things simple. That is how the true beauty is allowed to shine. One of the most famous love poems is the most cliched and simple one can get. "How do I love you, let me count the ways." That is some cheesy s**t lol. So, don't worry about your poem being too simple. It is simple because love is an emotion that readily expresses itself, and you captured that. Good job :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

2 Weeks Ago

Kayla your reviews are always welcome and I love how you just get it! the meaning and the emotion th.. read more
This is tender and charming. No need to use a lot of sophisticated words to express a universal emotion. You did great!

Posted 5 Years Ago


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PJ
agree with freelancejouster

Posted 5 Years Ago


i don't really know if the short, cliche, unpunctuated lines are the most effective way to portray what you were going for.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I'm glad to see your writing pop up again, and it's amazing as always :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


This poem is great, its beautiful. I love how you answer the way the loved one wants. :)
this poem made me smile. Nice write :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Kes
Oh, this is gorgeous. It's so gorgeous.
It sums up how I feel right now. No, I'm not in love. :) I'm just obsessive about life and about death. I spent so long thinking about the end, that I forgot to think about the here and now at all. I'm living for the moment now.
This makes me feel alive.
It's perfect.

Posted 5 Years Ago


the poem in itself is beautiful and very well expressed and clear I am always in awe when I read your lines.. This poem made me smile and I love the way it was written and the flow, just awesome and heartfelt but I do somewhat agree with SwEet Pea in my opinion it needs more passion weaved in... just a little more something it was almost as if you were holding back but outstanding work Ashley

Posted 5 Years Ago


Hi !

I think it is fine, but I think you are playing it too safe. I hear what your telling me ,but not exactly in touch with the depth of what your feeling ... You know ?

Your in love ,but what do you feel when she touches your hand, your lips....

~SwEeT

Posted 5 Years Ago



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