Windowless Room

Windowless Room

A Poem by {A}shley {B}lack @-;-
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A Poem about loneliness

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Windowless Room

I sit here, a single tear fills my eye
the realization that this is my life 
the way I am now,
 is when I'm at an all time high
music paints my plain walls
clothing hides my empty tomb
I feel submerged in water 
like returning to the womb 
the walls close in 
this windowless room

Life has a way of taking our dreams
it has a way of hiding our screams
it has a way of sheltering our fears
but there is no defence from our tears, 

They escape the spherical cage 
journey down our face
unleashing our emotions 
putting us in our place
for this is my life this is as good as it gets
what I live for now 
I can't have regrets,

I have running water 
I have plenty of food
money is not a problem
but here I am glued
I still can find a fault
for I am alone in this windowless room
my body,my shell is my occupied tomb 
music is playing I see the waves
I feel it crashing 
my ears are its slaves

I may seem to be living
but I'm dead inside
so in the corner of the windowless room
that's where I hide
I harvest my thoughts 
I spread my feelings
but I have a secret

I am the Windowless Room


© 2011 {A}shley {B}lack @-;-



Author's Note

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
I hope you like this poem

Please review and be honest as always

Thank you for reading it means so much

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You described this perfectly. Even before you reached the last lines, it was clear in the forlorn tone and descriptions of the subject of the poem that there were many parallels between the room and the subject. Emptiness and loneliness are something I believe all of us are forced to battle at one time or another in our lives, so this poem is highly relatable. It's ironic to think that while many of us are that windowless room, or have been, we were all linked through our emotions. This poem really finds that dark place inside of you and brings it to completion. Well done.

Posted 1 Week Ago


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{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

1 Week Ago

Thank you for your kind review I hope that one day we all find that window we are looking for
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I'm actually struggling with loneliness by getting myself to be more active and sociable, yet its like the ego is at war with personal demons. I suffer from anxiety and I guess this poem really speaks to me because its how I've been living my life so far...stuck in a room...even though mine has windows ;P

I like how you've captured and expressed loneliness, you really did a fine job at conveying it, I didn't have a problem reading. It makes you think up new ways on how to write sadness. Normally I'd call any form of sad poetry on here emo because lately there's been a rise of it on this site by lame teenagers with their stupid angst (that's just me though), but this one isn't and its f*****g refreshing to read poetry that decently conveys the emotion, not sabotage it with angst and crummy high school life, lol

-salutes-

The ending is quite powerful in its sadness, the realization of what it all boils down to.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Deep and dark, all have a unique wound.

Posted 5 Years Ago


You are transcending beyond the inner realm into the great spherical universe! Wonderful expressive writing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Magnificent write! I like how it builds up, showing how loneliness affects the mind. How we turn to anything to fill the void. How we turn the stereo up loud cause we cant bear the silence. We can have plenty of money - we can lack for nothing but still feel hollow, trapped in a 'Windowless Room'...
And we feel helpless. trapped in our own minds - cause that's the only prison. We are the Windowless Room.
And we are trapped in ourselves.
Great write, thank you for sharing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


a wonderful concept and a powerful undertow.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This poem shows some really strong emotions and I like it.It's honest and great as it is.Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I love the word usage...especially in the last 4 lines of the first grouping..A very deep and thoughtful poem..Good writing..Kathie

Posted 5 Years Ago


Good write, mate. Melancholic, dark...You manage to put all these feelings of loneliness and pain in such good way. Excellent job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Well-written, and most definetly great job at capturing the feeling of this work of art. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Too many Windowless rooms on the Planet.
Excellent capture of true loneliness. Been there, and still go once in awhile...

Posted 5 Years Ago



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{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

Sheriffhales, Shropshire , United Kingdom



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I Am Ashley Black (an alter ego ) I have a dark mind when it comes to my poetry as the strongest emotions come from negative RETURNING- I have been distant from this site for a while but I am fina.. more..

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