Hopeless

 

Hopeless

    By Rachael

 

 

When you’re exceedingly tired, but you want to try again

When you’re infinitely numb, but you want to feel again

When you’re thoughts are severely irrational, but you want to feel sane 

When you’re overly eager for love, but when received, all you express is pain

Overtly continuing in circles over and over again

Hoping, on your hands and knees, that this excruciating cycle will end

You want a happily ever after, a willing friend

If you keep to isolating yourself, how can that begin?

For someone to pull you out of the depths, to abolish this dread

But what’s the point of hoping, when it is as if you’re already dead.

Author's Note

This is my first time really, and fully expressing my thoughts. I guess I've sort of been holding back, but I've turned a new leaf and finally been honest with myself. Hope you enjoy!

Reviews

[SyberRose]

That what poets do... express their thoughts...nicely done hon...hugs

[NITHIN PURPLE]

good subject of human issues hope and hopelessness.and who wins last...so trying more will wins the last!! good poem

[Jordan Chisam]

Wow... this made me tear a little bit...very powerful

[Rachael]

Awh, Thanks so much. I really appreciate your review. :)

[Sourav]

Very nice. Well expressed... but as you can see hope never dies.

[MoriartyMesa]

This is a more feel of a personal nature that might co-exist across time. The maid, the servant girl, or the gf. Nice way of presentation.

[Nami Machae]

very nice :)

[Honeycomb]

Woow! I can relate this one, I must almost cry!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Well, nice for a first time work.
I like the thought of this poem. Hope never ends, because as long as we live, there's hope. If you surrendered, you're like a dead...hopeless. So help yourself before others help you. Love yourself before others love you.
Keep shining.

[17thWhitePrince]

A well written piece indeed !!!
You definately are able to express your deep dark thoughts of despair
I do hope for your sake that someone will indeed rescue you and fulfill your happily everafter =D

[Chris Dominguez]

i love your writing style and how you go back and forth through each line. it was well written

[Rachael]

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it :)