The Sun

The Sun

A Poem by 1blaquote
"

Sun Lover

"

Slowly it rises up from behind the ocean.

Shimmering like diamond crystals in motion.

 

It's bright radiate glow peaks by high noon,
Then it prepares the sky for the stars and moon.


Surely as it appears, it desends and disappears.

It's faithfulness has lasted for billions of years.
 


© 2008 1blaquote



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I liked this. It was good for a First Time, as you said. :D

It's bright radiate glow peaks by high noon,
Then it prepares the sky for the stars and moon.

^
^
These two lines were my favorite, since I think they captured the sun most. And that part about the sun being faithful was a good move.

I think it lacks something, however. The ending was too abrupt--you could have written more, I believe. Much more. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Short sweet and too the point, a very good write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This poem is beautiful in it's simplicity. I can see the sun rising, peaking and ebbing through each line of this work. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the poem... but what has it to do with Limerick, Ireland?

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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This piece is very beautiful, it touches the emotions but not too heavily. Like a lover's caress on the mind. Your use of language provides a vivid image that is captivating and alluring, and you've once more proven yourself to be force to be reckoned with.

Many blessings.

- Maliya Erison

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very beautifully expressed.

It's faithfulness has lasted for billions of years.
-I loved this line.

That's why they say "shine like the sun"

Well penned.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked this. It was good for a First Time, as you said. :D

It's bright radiate glow peaks by high noon,
Then it prepares the sky for the stars and moon.

^
^
These two lines were my favorite, since I think they captured the sun most. And that part about the sun being faithful was a good move.

I think it lacks something, however. The ending was too abrupt--you could have written more, I believe. Much more. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I really like this! I love the flow of the words, though I personally don't believe the part about the billions of years. Otherwise, I think it is great! I don't know much about Limerick, so I can't help you there. =)

Elise

Posted 10 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Detroit, MI



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I am a self-published author of "Speak It Loud," a collection of 22 poems filled with food for thought. I am a self proclaimed activist in my community. I am a parent of 3 beautiful children. I beca.. more..

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