Life

Life

A Poem by Sierra D3

Life is like a  flower

with no real power.

But when that flower starts to grow,

your true self starts to show.

Then there is a time when you feel cold and alone

when your petals start to fall all on there own.

Family, and friends come and go

like the fall and winter snow

When that flower starts to die

you want to curl up and cry.

But in that flower

there is a seed the holds all the true power.

The power that will start new life.

That life which will stand and fight.

 

© 2012 Sierra D3


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Wow, this poem is very impressive, especially for a 15 year old. The rhyme scheme is great, nice word choice. You did very well at expressing the message of the poem through an extended metaphor, and the metaphor itself is a good one.The only thing I think needs to change is that you should turn the first line into a metaphor, rather than a simile. What you wrote is called an extended metaphor poem, a single metaphor is stretched out through the entire poem. However, in an extended metaphor, you're not supposed to have similes, though you can. You should change it to "Life is but a flower", or something of the like. You're talented, and you have many years ahead of you to get even better at writing. And trust me, you will only get better. The older you get, the wider your vocabulary becomes, the more you learn about literary devices and how to use them, the more poetry you read for inspiration, etc.



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very nice poem, it had excellent word choice, and excellent rhyming scheme. I love how this poem holds a deep meaning and it is (to a certain extent) open to interpretation. Great work and thank you for sharing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, this poem is very impressive, especially for a 15 year old. The rhyme scheme is great, nice word choice. You did very well at expressing the message of the poem through an extended metaphor, and the metaphor itself is a good one.The only thing I think needs to change is that you should turn the first line into a metaphor, rather than a simile. What you wrote is called an extended metaphor poem, a single metaphor is stretched out through the entire poem. However, in an extended metaphor, you're not supposed to have similes, though you can. You should change it to "Life is but a flower", or something of the like. You're talented, and you have many years ahead of you to get even better at writing. And trust me, you will only get better. The older you get, the wider your vocabulary becomes, the more you learn about literary devices and how to use them, the more poetry you read for inspiration, etc.



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It relates so well to a flowers life and a human's life

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awsome, i like how you went back to the flower and power rhyming. a great metaphor for life. keep up the good work

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sierra D3

11 Years Ago

thank you
tell me what you think :)


Posted 11 Years Ago



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Sierra D3
Sierra D3

Dallas, TX



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