Everything you hate

You are the one I dread, you are the one I mistook to
Be the one. You ask me what I want to be to be? Everything
You hate. Please go away, I don't want to be near you, I don't
Want to feel you like i once did, a great time, that now lies broken
And shattered on the floor in front of me. My tears a waterfall that you laugh at,
Your words like knives. The feeling of betrayal drove me to the edge, and
You are everything I hate, but I forgive, my new girl at my side thrives me, enough
For me to forgive the monster that is your soul. You shredded my
Heart like it was nothing in front of me, so I work hard to become
Everything you hate.

Author's Note

Please comment on how I can improve my poetry. I'm twelve so keep it age appropriate. See this and more of my poems at Unitedworldpoets.com. Thx!

Reviews

[misscb]

Wow!!! This is very deep and powerful piece...
Very impressive for your age...
Well done!!!

[Andrea]

This is inedible. wow that's a lot of strong emotion for a twelve year old. Try to avoid those kinda stresses at this age lol. But it is a really good poem.