Hear Me Scream

The puzzle of life,

the jungle that I am in.

every where,

and no where to go.

Happiness,

was never there.

madness now setting in,

for I am now alone.

You had caught my eye,

something different .

Contrast,

such a delight.

Made me shiver,

warmed my thoughts.

then one day,

in the rain.

You left me cold,

with an aching thirst.

That was when,

perspective changed.

Life flipped,

everything became nothing.

Warmth of mine,

dulled and then left me.

Just as you did,

for you never truly cared.

I now know,

the truth of it.

Horror of this,

lie undone.

Just a pretty picture,

that I got to hold but a moment.

Yet,

still I hurt from the truth.

the memory so clear,

peering at me through hollow eyes.

blunt force,

blood now everywhere.

Pain gripping me,

numbness spreading ever so slow.

Emotionless,

a harmful accomplishment.

For my regret,

must I learn from them.

Or else I'll fall in,

to a trap again.

So here we go,

to ride once more.

through this unwanted adventure,

of personal torment.

so fasten your seat belts,

Open your eyes.

 hear me scream.

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

I can embrace a write such as this. Its pain is apparent and something I think just about anyone can relate to. Your word play is also a well woven fabric that ties everything in place. When I read this I could feel such heartbreak. I could have it all wrong as well, but still I couldn't help but feel this power of overwhelming sadness and maybe fear. Well penned.

[Cole Hayley]

Very alpha, dominance, raw. I loved it. Its blunt but powerful.

[Lily Mae]

Such depth in the emotions of suffering.. You said it well with emotionless.. such void.. xo excellent write.

[Aaran]

A dark, melancholic piece... i am reading one of these after a long time...you have done a good job :)

[That_Girl]

Very clever piece! Enjoyed every line!

[Gothic Girl]

drama, helplessness, suffering; you portrayed them well here. great piece. :)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

emotional, wonderful piece. Nicely done!

[MoriartyMesa]

One may take away a lot from something of this level, what one should take away is the love and if not charm, insightful and keen eye of the words themselves as they flow like snow milting to water.

[afra]

great write ....keep writing

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Exceptional piece of poetry, I love it :)