slippers

slippers

A Poem by pragya gaur
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ThiS poem is just to describe the use of slippers. I wrote it while drinking tea just to come out from family poems. Be free to critisize if you find an error

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For protecting our foot,
Thr equipment used are slippers.
Just like clothes to body,
Are slippers to foot.
Available in different sizes,
Available in different styles.
Fit all types of legs,
Provide all types of comfort.
Prevent foot from cracking,
Provide comfort in walking.
Slippers are of great use,
And they are found in every house.
Walking barefoot in hot deserts,
Walking barefoot in rough surfaces,
Is indeed an impossible task.
Wearing a slipper,
Makes it an easy task.

© 2017 pragya gaur



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slippers do feel good....a bit more protection than bare feet---but then i can't wear them on the tennis court-----might hurt the heels....i am sure slippers are happy to be written about. Needs a little editing but a happy piece....wish it were easierfor me to write happy.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pragya gaur

3 Months Ago

Thanks a lot for your read and review



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slippers do feel good....a bit more protection than bare feet---but then i can't wear them on the tennis court-----might hurt the heels....i am sure slippers are happy to be written about. Needs a little editing but a happy piece....wish it were easierfor me to write happy.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pragya gaur

3 Months Ago

Thanks a lot for your read and review
After reading this i remembered that famous dailog from the ad " pairon k liye paragon . . " hehe .
I liked the simplicity by which you have represented it . .u could have givin it a comic appeal to this instead of an overdescription. . its just a suggestion . . overAll i loved your work . keep sharing

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pragya gaur

3 Months Ago

Thanku pravir ji
Thanks for the inbox message to review, I don't like to criticize writings as I don't like it done to me, but I would look into using more personal words like a, your, her, his, their, our. These make poems more enjoyable. Broken English or strict sentencing needs to breathe.. or flow. A rhythm is missing, I would say. Like Nora, I agree this is different than the normal poetry or writing. Good job.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pragya gaur

3 Months Ago

Thanku mam
A different one...Enjoyed this piece.
keep it up.

i think in second line "Thr" should be "The"

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pragya gaur

4 Months Ago

Thanks Nora ji...

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