Night

When day fades away

the moon and stars shine brightly

alas, morning light 

Kasey Miriam 2015

Reviews

[Syrmah]

I really like this. As I understand it, I feel the contempt towards the morning light almost ruining this twilight beauty. I wonder if a comma after "alas" could act as a caesura in order to solidify that idea, "alas, morning light". I think it would physically make the reader sigh along with it.

[Kasey Miriam]

That is a grand idea thank you very much for that and reading as well

[Ryan Henderson]

VERY short poem, which I like. Short, sweet and to the point. Good, simple poem that is easy to grasp, read and understand :)

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you very much!

[willweb]

This was simply beautiful. Very soothing and comforting. I enjoyed this today.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you very much for the review I'm glad you liked it.

[Sami Khalil]

"When day fades away
the moon and stars shine brightly
alas, morning light "

[Draven]

I felt a sense of relief in reading this. Short poem, few words, though each one so relatable. Good work

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you so very much

[Jordan Jackson]

Simply perfect. I love the contrast between night and day.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you very much!

[Jordan Jackson]

Keep writing, you're so talented!

[Kasey Miriam]

Oh goodness how sweet of you.. I will. New inspration will hopefully come from the trip I will be taking soon.

[SonOfPlunder]

So simple, but profound. Nice work Kasey

[Kasey Miriam]

Thanks so much that means a lot to me!

[SonOfPlunder]

You're very welcome!

[captain]

ahh, a simple but beautiful tribute to the night and the next daylight. I like it!

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you very much!

[Aethereal]

Your poem reminds me of the cyclic nature all things. It inspired me to write this gift poem for you which you may keep as your own:

Cycles

Day fades in tonight
bringing forth new tomorrows
cycling dim to bright.

[Kasey Miriam]

Thank you dear. How very kind and lovely a poem too. Thank you again!

[Aethereal]

You're welcome!