About a 10 second snippet

About a 10 second snippet

A Story by CarlyFlower

She remembered clearly the moment he took off his clothes. Time was still. Her weight tugging down at the metal cuffs, she could feel the edges cutting into her skin. Though a smile was foreign to his face, he watched her with the biggest smile she had ever seen. He was a stranger now. He always wore layers of black all over himself, even his eyes; it was about the only thing anyone knew him for. It was part of who he was, since there wasn't much to him.
As she looked up with tears in her eyes, begging once more for him to let her go, he started to shed his many layers of black, holding his perverted smile. He took his clothes off anxiously. He had her right where he wanted her. In those moments, he shed his identity. She had never seen him before. He was no longer hiding behind his clothes, his many layers of black. His body was brown, unimpressive, and sloven. His hair was long, nappy, and unkempt so that it almost resembled dreadlocks.
Even though it was a revolting sight, she couldn't help but stare. Time was so slow, and she stood quiet now, realizing this was the first time she'd seen a man nude. Her attention was on his skin. His skin was very brown all over. It was something she had never seen. She hated it. He wore it proud without his layers of black. He was now wearing nothing but his evil, eager smile. Moving just as hastily as he had removed his clothing, he approached her. Time began again.

© 2017 CarlyFlower

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The story speaks very well. Keep it up!

Posted 1 Year Ago

I really like this piece. It's expressive and bold. I also highly appreciate how the language is not that complicated and i can guess that you've done that so the story is relatable to everybody. I also really like how you made it just one paragraph this mirrors that the minute she begins fearing for her life it's as if this is a cruel ongoing reality. Keep up the good work.

Posted 1 Year Ago

I'm not a stories person but I like this. I like how detailed it is. It brings the picture of the girl point of view out. Really nice. I hope you keep writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago

Very detailed place you described. I liked the thoughts and the honest tone of the words. You allowed the reader to understand the second. Thank you Carly for sharing the amazing poetry.

Posted 1 Year Ago

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Added on May 18, 2017
Last Updated on May 18, 2017



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