The Balloon

To anyone being pulled along through life, with the hope of cutting the strings keeping you down.

You fixed a string to keep me down; your every move I bowed

Down the path I didn't want, further into the crowd.

Although I fly above you all, It isn't high enough,

I could be so much higher, If I was not your cuff.

I long for the sky. Cant you feel me pulling away?

I beg and tug and pull, but to you it's just the breeze,

I wish I had a voice in me, so you could hear my pleas.

Please untie this cord and let me fly into the distance.

If I don't rise to greater heights, you'll never know my brilliance.

I'm capable of more than you, who likes it on the ground.

Much more lies in store for me, up in the blue and cloud.

I'm sick of bouncing after you, so bitter I could burst.

I'm what you thought you needed. What you thought you'd want.

I hoped to bring you happiness, but it was all for naught.

The twist around your wrist isn't strong enough for two.

Now I will say goodbye and you will let me start anew.

So please cut the string and finally let me be.

I'll show you everything about being free.  

Reviews

[Ana B.]

Very symbolic in so many ways... Lovely writing, my favorite line was: ''I'm sick of bouncing after you, so bitter I could burst.'' We've all been there...

[WhiteWolf]

This is amazing. I love it!

[Aleks Edwin]

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it :D

[BThomvanWart]

There's definitely a longing to be weightless - to live without the burden of someone else pinning you in a corner. It almost made my heart break. For a moment, I felt like I could just reach out with scissors and cut the chord, but unfortunately, no one else can do that. And I think that's what made this poem hit home, y'know? It's a very nicely written piece. And to think you've crafted such a serious piece around a whimsical object, now that's talent!

[Aleks Edwin]

Sorry for the delayed reply! But thank you for taking the time to read this. Your poignant, insightful review really made me happy! I'm glad the message I was trying to convey is coming across. :)

[Peach]

I like the personification you gave to the balloon. I admire your rhyming pattern. Keep up the great work

[Aleks Edwin]

Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read it :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was different, but in a good way.
You where like using the balloon as like a person.
Describing how a balloon would feel if, it could feel haha, to how some people may feel sometimes.
Tied down, just wanting to be free.
You get major points for creativity.
Loved this :)

[Aleks Edwin]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it :D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome :)

[Daisygirl]

I really love the unique perspective!

[Aleks Edwin]

Thanks :) It was a fun poem to write

[misha]

This was a nice write. Great job!

[@zeewhykay]

Woooooow buddy what the hell was that !! Dude don't take anymore breaks of writing, you have real talent !
This is textbook impressive writing. I am definitely checking out the rest of your stuff !

[Brittany Zedalis]

Ah, this makes me think of so many things. It reminds me of someone I dated 4 times, who kept me from really getting anywhere in life until I finally broke free. This was really well written. :)

[Aleks Edwin]

Thank you so much! I'm happy that you liked it! I had a similar experience to yours and it felt good to write it out in this metaphor, lol. Im glad people can relate to it :D

[Shaquana Adams]

I'm glad I stayed up late. This poem is so well written. I found myself rooting for the narrator to be free at the end. Great job Aleks! :)

[Aleks Edwin]

Wow! thanks! Im so happy you liked it :D