Rich Man

Just something I cam up with out of bordem

The blood drips,

And drips

And drips

It starts to

Flow,

a river it forms

A river of death

A river of greed

We sweat our blood

No longer to eat

But to feed those hungry souls

They devour us,

Day by day,

And burn right through our blood

They do not care,

Our names,

Our friends,

Our hopes and dreams,

All they do is take,

Take,

Take,

There are, our curse

Our burden to bare.

For there is no end to a greedy man’s hollow soul.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Enigma]

Greed, a deathly sin. This is very deep, intense even.

[Alexa Tasch]

Wonderful and deep!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[scripted]

wow!!! This had a very creative feel to it. Good job. Thank you for sharing, yours truely

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you!

[Devanshu Rajput]

good write

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you!

[Devanshu Rajput]

again welcome

[Darkening Shadow]

Nice Imagery. "All they do it take," maybe you meant "is" instead of "it"

[AWickedMoon]

Oh thank you for pointing that out! :)

[Darkening Shadow]

Welcome

[L. Catherine]

I like the way you describes blood as a flowing river; really creates an interesting mental picture. Good work!

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! :)

[L. Catherine]

Welcome!

[Calibaster]

You do like blood!!! (or at least, you like describing it.) :) Great job though! I liked how you repeated words. It gave a dramatic affect.

[AWickedMoon]

Ha-ha! Yes most likely I enjoy describing it; I mean I wouldn’t want you to find out I’m a vampire...Cough* cough*. Just joshing around. :)

[Calibaster]

Don't worry, I'm a werewolf.

[AWickedMoon]

Haha good to know :)

[Calibaster]

:)

[Monster ^.^]

The way you made "greed takes out the lives of men" into a visual sense is impressive. Blood is such a good metaphor for a man's will, slowly eaten away by the greed... nice :)

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! I wasnt really sure of this poem,so I thank you for your kind words. :)

[Megara]

there truely is no end to a greedy man's hollow soul!

[AWickedMoon]

No sadly there isnt. But thankyou for reviewing :)

[Megara]

any time:)