Flames

I just found this one in my massive pile of poetry. I wrote this when I was 13. I, truthfuly, really like it.

Canes tapping the embers,

Jumping,

And dancing out of the flame,

Making the joyous man laugh with glee.

 

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

I liked this, but I'd suggest either a new title or an attempt to find an alternative for the word 'flame', as it loses its magic being repeated in such a short poem.
Well done 13-year old you; it's an intriguing poetic setting.
Thanks for sharing it with us.

[Caitlin Nicole]

Wow! This is so short but so amazing! I, truthfully, really like it as well!