The Hate Remains, in Unlikely Names

I had this posted before... but it was deleted by some moron who works here on writers cafe. Right now I'm on my last nerve with this place. Thank you Kimari Blue for quoting my poem in your comment... it made it easier to identify.

King Martin,

Luther,

Junior.

Civil rights fought,

Gained.

Killed in process:

Does his name truly remain?

 

B. Anthony,

Dear Teresa,

Mother:

Gandhi and,

Now…

Look at you!

Ha! How mighty are you now,

Dead as knobs to doors,

Names now used as the raped,

Dead w***e.

And those they opposed,

Still roam free, live,

Never to learn.

 

Author's Note

I had this posted before... but it was deleted by some moron who works here on writers cafe. Right now I'm on my last nerve with this place. Thank you Kimari Blue for quoting my poem in your comment... it made it easier to identify. I officaly now love you. :)

Reviews

[DarkAngelWriter]

Your personal message and author's note pretty much ruined this piece for me. Don't get me wrong, it was a good piece, but I'm so tired of people being jerks to Charlie. He made a mistake. He messed up. But he's only human! I lost 49 pieces in the "Big Delete", but I don't hate Charlie. I could never hate Charlie. I just wish you were more open minded about things...

But yes, this was a good piece as well. Thank you for allowing me to read it.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

*sigh* If you have too much power or plans for world peace, your life is cut short by the assassin. Sucks. :P This is a neat poem. ^^ Great job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Raef C. Boylan]

The reversal of names is interesting; as they're well-known names, i think it might be part of the message you're trying to get across, but can't work out exactly what the technique does...but i like it.
Hate, the concept, lives on, while each individual who stands against it will die.
Sad but true.

Well-written and a great social commentary for this subject.
Thanks for posting this.

In a re-read, think i maybe get the name reversal: 'King' Martin and 'Mother' are strong, endearing terms...'King' kind of summarises the nobility and 'Mother' the kindness that they are remembered for. Am i on the right track?

[Alex Dagger]

This has very strong wording to it. and it is also very true, great job

[Gandré]

I liked your poem! It is almost a sociological sight with a suprising twist.

[DG]

I love the last statement. Where it suggests that those filled with hate are still alive but those who meant well and wanted peace have died and in a way dont mean as much anymore. I really liked the way the poem was written in fragments. Good job its a great poem. =)

[Kemari Blue]

Such a sad, poetic truth you carved out here. It always hurts just a little bit to read the truth, a desolate truth that you know won't change with just one person.

You evoked the right emotions in this one, written very well.

This is really strong:

Dead as knobs to doors,
Names now used as the raped,
Dead w***e.
And those they opposed,
Still roam free, live,
Never to learn.


xo,
KeMari

[Carmen]

yep. this was good. great message. loved the structure.

[Dandy Jon Powder]

Wow, your so f*****g good with your craft man!