Limestone

Limestone

Perching on rocks

her favorite past time,

considering;

the bottle

over the buck.

 

With only a shoe left

on the right foot,

her toes point

to one side.

 

Her side.

 

And she feels

the weight of her

mothers dreams,

push her through the limestone

and the granite.

 

Yet her fathers ideals

feel like feathers,

unfortunately.

 

This is what has

held her in place

for years.

 

She would walk away

if she were not so scared,

of cutting her feet.

Reviews

[W.k.kortas]

I have to agree with the consensus that's formed on the quality of the imagery--the strongly visual nature, the juxtaposition of the limestone and granite--and the overall construction of the piece is elegant as well.

[J.P. Bristow]

amazing imagery
-dripping with emotion

-great write!

[Hello, Goodbye]

Your brevity and usage of pauses are curiously creative.

[Emily B]

stunning work . . . I wish I could say more

but one day I will come back to it