Forever Lost

Forever Lost

A Poem by Abel Garcia
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About Peace and Chaos

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 Crystal skies fill me with peace,
 an overwhelming Reminder of Love,
 
Compassion, and Soul.
 Yet still chaos tempts to guide me further,
 Tries to end my life.
 At times i feel that all of my soul is peaceful,
 and still half tempts me to destroy myself,
 with remembrance of my past.
 Sometimes i feel,
 Forever Lost.


© 2010 Abel Garcia



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I have to agree with Brittany, it would seem a lot more poetic if you formatted this into stanzas. I also have to say that the big font was kind of distracting and I focused more on that than the quality of your writing, presentation is part of the writing process too (but of course not as important). But over all this is a great poem and when I get time i'll be reading more of your writing.

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Totally relatable!! Nice peice.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Nice poem,
please keep it up,
great work.

Posted 4 Years Ago


thanks brittany i will try harder with stanzas Next time :D

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This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


I have to agree with Brittany, it would seem a lot more poetic if you formatted this into stanzas. I also have to say that the big font was kind of distracting and I focused more on that than the quality of your writing, presentation is part of the writing process too (but of course not as important). But over all this is a great poem and when I get time i'll be reading more of your writing.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the poem, but couldn't you put it into stanzas like
Crystal skies fill me with peace,
an overwhelming Reminder of Love,
Compassion, and Soul
Something like that. Otherwise, I love it, I hope you keep writing ^-^

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Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: peace, chaos, forever, lost, gone, dead, life, soul
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Abel Garcia
Abel Garcia

Round Rock, TX



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I am a Poet and Short Story writer from Austin, Tx. My writing is either A) Dedicated to somebody, and based upon a topic THEY will know. or B) The sad truths behind the world we live in, through my o.. more..

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