Deep Love

Deep Love

A Poem by Abhishek Asthana
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sometimes we fell in love with the most unexpected person because that person loved you when you could not love yourself...

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Might be i was an amateur, beyond romantic prospect,
That exquisite encounter, still i recollect.



Your captivating smile,my vexed expressions,
Steadily, we had learnt some combined endearing lessons.



Despite being contrary to each other, we fell in love,
Since then we are ardent, like pretty pair of dove.



Abstaining from daily chores, all midnight discourse,
It was altogether charismatic and alluring force.



The undergone changes led to the brutal killing of heart,
Love never ceased after wrangles, that is a surpassing part.



This bonding is analogous to a felicific tree, while our credence is the root,
Manifestly, this story will succeed,we are being optimistic and resolute.


© 2017 Abhishek Asthana



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The words you've used here, are so strong and so mature! And the rhyming scheme is just amazing. Thirdly, the emotions and love you have put in this piece is.... Extraordinary. I'm sorry I'm reviewing this a bit late. But I really loved this one. Keep writing!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

3 Months Ago

No worries if you reviewed late... what matters it should impact my readers the same way which I des.. read more
Anjali

3 Months Ago

Haha.... So true, you are welcome!



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Oh my god
this is so amazing

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks a lot for reading... I am glad you liked it
This is so beautiful.💕
There was such a beautiful smile on my face while reading this.
'Since then we are ardent, like pretty pair of dove'
So Beautiful 💕

Posted 3 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

3 Months Ago

That's exactly what my object was...I want that smile on each of my reader's face... now I guess I s.. read more
Rashi Jain

3 Months Ago

Yes, surely you did.😊
The words you've used here, are so strong and so mature! And the rhyming scheme is just amazing. Thirdly, the emotions and love you have put in this piece is.... Extraordinary. I'm sorry I'm reviewing this a bit late. But I really loved this one. Keep writing!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

3 Months Ago

No worries if you reviewed late... what matters it should impact my readers the same way which I des.. read more
Anjali

3 Months Ago

Haha.... So true, you are welcome!
Love never ceased after wrangles, that is a surpassing part.

=>this would be my favorite line. love it so much

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

4 Months Ago

and mine is ..."This bonding is analogous to a felicific tree, while our credence is the root,"... t.. read more
L.C. Jarrette

4 Months Ago

you're welcome sir...
Thank you for sharing this poem with me Abhishek.

Here I would be a constructive critic:

"sometimes we fell in love with the most unexpected person because that person loved you when you could not love yourself..."

It should be

"sometimes we fall in love with the most unexpected person because that person love you when you could not love yourself..."

Apart from this, your poem expresses deep emotions and optimism.

Regards,
Anjali

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Abhishek Asthana

4 Months Ago

sorry... not agreed...because what you have written ""sometimes we fall in love with the most unexpe.. read more
As constructive criticism you might wanna work on sentence construction a lil bit
Otherwise i think you have great vocabulary and a wonderful way of portraying your emotions and your ideas in your work
I loved it
It was deep and heart warming

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Abhishek Asthana

4 Months Ago

thank you so much for your kind words pia
Again, syllable by syllable bliss... Charismatic and alluring word choice, still... As well as brutal rhymes flying on doves wings... No wrong... Resolutely penned...

Posted 4 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

4 Months Ago

sir, you have your own unique way of reviewing which i really admire,,, hahaha,,, thanks alot for yo.. read more
Silente

4 Months Ago

I try to convey the unique feel I get from each work when I review, if you liked what I said... You .. read more
Its a wonderful poem...
Your writing skills are great...
Keep writing....:)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

not really,, still i am learning,, very pleased tto know you liked this piece... thanks a lot :)
Neetha

5 Months Ago

You are welcome...
A great amateur...:)
Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

hahaha,, sounds funny
"The undergone changes led to the brutal killing of heart,
Love never ceased after wrangles, that is a surpassing part."..... amazing lines, I loved it.
Beside that the comparison of couple with that of "pretty pair of dove". is so beautiful. Keep it up.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

thank you,,, even many of my friends liked that point of comparison,,, it was my first romantic piec.. read more
Priyanshi

5 Months Ago

pleasure is mine.
wonderful write....i loved this!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

thank you so much wajiha...

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Lucknow , The City of Nawabs, India



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