The Poor Crow

The Poor Crow

A Poem by Abhishek Asthana
"

Love is just love, it can never explained.

"

O sweetie! You failed to comprehend,

my love for you is so fervid,

you couldn't caught glimpse of my affection,

which seems charming and avid...

 

 

 

if you would reunite with someone else in the future,

your pictures from my walls,

i will have a wild urge to throw..

it will be harder for me to swallow this sense of betrayal,

i would evidently die,

and will become a brusque crow..

 

 

 

afterwards your marriage, i would approach  your home on daily basis,

i am threatening, caw! caw! noise,

i'll make entire day,

""how to get rid of this bloody crow"",

you, couple would only pray..

 

 

 

i'll be the playmate of your kids,

i would sing songs for them in my egregious tone..

i am convinced they won't be really fond of,

but they'll enquire, ""who is this creature, completely unknown"" ?..

 

 

 

your other half will get exasperated,

he'll surely take out his mauser from your gun-locker..

but i will be dismayed on seeing weapon of my adversary,

i'll tease, ""i have wings which do not need any door-knocker""..

 

 

 

since i will be targeted by the sniper, in case i die,

i will question your husband, ""why did you kill me again""..

""you  murdered me, when you married my love""

""even  today  you gave me a similar pain"" !!

 

 






© 2017 Abhishek Asthana



Author's Note

Abhishek Asthana
This poem is based on the conversation that had place between two young lovers, that how worst the life are going to be for the boy if their bonding could not last for so long. How scary the life would be without his soulmate.
I had been given a task to present this chat in poetic structure in front of you guys. It was not so easy for me as i had to keep it shorter in terms of content. Few of you guys would find it is so funny while some of you would feel that it is a cute one and few will find this piece so emotional. But the moment i finished this, i was literally sympathize with the character that has been portrayed. Your reviews can help him out in finding peace to his soul. I really do not know whether he is alive or not. Read it from core of your heart.

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Your poems really inspire me that we can write poetically and with feel... Not everyone can do that. Crazy imagination to turn a chat into such a wonderful poem. Yes it looked funny in the starting and sweetly it is but yet we can see the satire behind this. I am not a romantic poems expert but yet this was really full of love and pain.

i will question your husband, ""why did you kill me again""..
""you murdered me, when you married my love""
""even today you gave me a similar pain"" !!
These lines nailed it...
Thank you for sharing

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heartspeaks

6 Months Ago

Its very sweet of you. yeah was kind of busy . Sorry for the late review... will make sure to be soo.. read more
Abhishek Asthana

6 Months Ago

Yeah... but I don't agree with some of your words that you aren't a romantic poem expert... still I .. read more
heartspeaks

6 Months Ago

honoured that you still remember it. Thank you , Will try my best



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awesome poem . loved the way it ended with the narrator asking the man of why did he have to ill hi twice .

Posted 2 Months Ago


Totally loved it

Posted 2 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reaching
This is so imaginative & brilliant! It makes me want to write something in a similar vein . . . I love the idea of following someone you love, someone who rejected you, by shape-shifting into another type of being. Great details to show us the trajectory of this futile love situation, with the crow following his lost love's life & family. I don't see this as funny or sad. It's just a great story of empowerment, as to how we can still be in touch with people we are not in touch with . . . there are other dimensions we can use to be close to someone we can't be near.

Posted 4 Months Ago


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I absolutely loved this poem! This style of writing is very similar to my favorite author Edgar Allen Poe.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your kind visit...Sir Edward was a great poet... even I have read some of his wor.. read more
Really appreciate your way of imagination ...Abhishek ji....You write very well

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your kind words pragya
I clearly understood the thought of writing it was really good and this could only be understood when you read and imagine and before writing you might have also imagined i really appriciate the level of imagination

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

5 Months Ago

Thanks a lot for understanding the intensity of that one... yes, it's really important for any write.. read more
Prashant Bajpai

5 Months Ago

yeah thats why i clearly mentioned in the review
Haha, I am sorry if I am not supposed to find comedy within this... But I certainly did... Exasperated husbands and gun lockers... Egregious tones wrapped up in bloody throes, those damn crows... Excellently written, rhymes and wordplay, punchlines and content... Good stuff, man... Thanks for sharing... Playfully penned...

Posted 6 Months Ago


Silente

6 Months Ago

Well, damn... You nailed it, then... You seem to break down writing into a science, almost... Brilli.. read more
Abhishek Asthana

6 Months Ago

you are always been an inspiration whenever i wanted to showcase any of the unique content...so you .. read more
Silente

6 Months Ago

Hah... Me... A scientist... Rue the day, my friend...
Your poems really inspire me that we can write poetically and with feel... Not everyone can do that. Crazy imagination to turn a chat into such a wonderful poem. Yes it looked funny in the starting and sweetly it is but yet we can see the satire behind this. I am not a romantic poems expert but yet this was really full of love and pain.

i will question your husband, ""why did you kill me again""..
""you murdered me, when you married my love""
""even today you gave me a similar pain"" !!
These lines nailed it...
Thank you for sharing

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heartspeaks

6 Months Ago

Its very sweet of you. yeah was kind of busy . Sorry for the late review... will make sure to be soo.. read more
Abhishek Asthana

6 Months Ago

Yeah... but I don't agree with some of your words that you aren't a romantic poem expert... still I .. read more
heartspeaks

6 Months Ago

honoured that you still remember it. Thank you , Will try my best
broken hearts and shattered dreams i guess is a part of life

Posted 6 Months Ago


Abhishek Asthana

6 Months Ago

i do agree with you sir,,,thank you so much sir :)
 wordman

6 Months Ago

my pleasure
Well it's written in a very creative manner...Well done

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

6 Months Ago

thank you so much for your kind visit and words :)
Sanskrity Mishra

6 Months Ago

Ur welcome :)

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Lucknow , The City of Nawabs, India



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