Rukhsat

I thought you would be the one to caught me when I fall... instead you're just another one pushing me over

Ahtiyat ab kya barte ke jaane bhi do ab,

Caarvaan chchordne ka lamha aa gaya..

 

 

Rukhsat aakhri bhi wo dene na aaye,

kaisa chahat ka ye falsafa aa gaya..

 

 

Shikwaa is baat ab zara bhi nahi,

Waqt guzra jo saath unke accha gaya..

 

 

Nashe se nahi par zaher se to hoga,

Haathon se jaam mere chalak sa gaya..

 

 

Saaye ne bhi to sang chalna chchoda hamare,

Jaise Naakami ka kaafila aa gaya..

 

 

Chand saansein bhi bojhal si lagne lagi,

Khud ki halat pe hamko rahem aa gaya..

 

 

Maayusi ki shehnaayi kyun baj gayi jab,

Unki galiyon se mera janaaja gaya !!

Author's Note

Here i am adding the english version of this poem just for the convenience of my readers

Translation :-
Now, it's no use taking precautions,
it's time to leave.

she didn't even come to say me a last goodbye,
see what is the outcome of my affection.

but no complaints from my side for that,
whatever time we had spent together was awesome.

better poison will make it easier, if alcohol cannot work,
see how wine spread from the brink of my glass.

even my own shadow has left me,
it's like the congregation of failure has arrived in my life.

life looks burdensome,
i am feeling pity for myself.

why someone had heard the funeral song,
when my final journey had gone through just beside her colony.

Reviews

[Ankita Dwivedi]

The hindi version brings the real feel of the poem with the tinge of some urdu words .i loved it , abhishek.
The departure hurts, but the sweet memories still, fill heart with nostalgia and longing .But we don't choose who we fall for .kuch log is qadar zindagi ka hissa ban jaate hai ,ki unke jaane par lagta hai ki zindagi hi nhi aap bhi khaali ho gye hai ..life goes on , and so it should ..Glad to finally find some hindi work here ..
-Ankita:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

Agreed with your views and thought process. I have written quite a few poems in hindi while i have plenty of ones but i do not share it here as only few readers are here who are having Hindi as their native language. Thanks for understanding the aura of the poem. I am glad you liked it. 

[Ankita Dwivedi]

i also, write a lot of hindi poems but i don't post here because the rhythm of the poem i feel is lost when u translate hindi into english or vice-versa.yeah , i really did like the work.:))

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Thank you for the translation. The poem took the reader on a sad journey. Thank you my friend for sharing the poem.
Coyote

[pragya gaur]

Deeply Touched my heart abhishek ji...I think hindi version is better because it is the best explained

[jayanth]

The emotions you've put in is working on point , good job man :) i don't know understand hindi , i feel this poem will have more impact on the hindi version. cheers :)

[Abhishek Asthana]

yes, i believe so... thank so much for taking out your time jayanth... really appreciate your words :)

[jayanth]

you're welcome brother :)

[Elizabeth]

You can really feel the emotions in this poem.
the word choice is perfect-
"Nashe se nahi par zaher se to hoga,
Haathon se jaam mere chalak sa gaya.."
really great

[Abhishek Asthana]

i'll take it as a compliment and i'lL try to keep on doing my best... i am glad you liked it

[heartspeaks]

WAAH! WAAH! no words...speechless... amazing work...keep going

[Abhishek Asthana]

thansk you so much... i am just glad you liked it...

[Pravir]

Awesome . .. . i love your selection of words . . jis khubsurti k sath aap kuchh v pesh krte ho mujhe bhut pasand aata hai . . ar jo english version tha usme you proved your talent . . wahhh mjaa aa gya . . . heart touching write

[Abhishek Asthana]

extremely thanks for your kind words pravir... dua krte hai aapko yuhi aage bhi pasand aata rhe... :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Woww, mate..you write very well in both the languages..amazing

[Abhishek Asthana]

thanks so much for reading and reviewing my friend :)

[Zephyr]

Glad you added the english version.
I am not so good in Hindi!
An emotional work Abhishek:)
Great work!

[Abhishek Asthana]

well, this was the easiest poem that i have written in hindi-urdu yet... otherwise usually i used some typical urdu words... i guess i did something right... thanks so much reading :)

[Zephyr]

I can understand Hindi But am poor in speaking!
So english version truly helps:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

okay, no worries,,, i'll keep in mind but its good to know that you understand hindi... at least you can grasp up to some extent...

[Zephyr]

That I can:)