Privacy Matters?

You never know the feeling of others

I was with you always

Listening to the lovely words

Without you knowing, feeling

Your emotions as i heard

You were talking to me whenever

You felt, I didn’t know

That it wasn’t me

That you talking to

Your bliss, shared with

Me as you share your grief

You were sad when you lost me

And after found, forever you hold me

I wish to be in this arms

Feeling your warm hands

Around me tight and

Those fondling was an ease

You keep me silent and

Kiss me many times as I know

I saw all your shame

But never mind the same

Wanna be the one in your

Heart in my coming life

B’coz now I can’t be

Since I’m only your phone

Author's Note

Love Love and Love only

Reviews

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

Privacy always matters. Always and never should waver. Ever. I admire the meaning of privacy. It's very crucial.

[Abraham George]

mmmm. thanks for your visit.

[Carol Cashes]

Ha! Our phones do get the attention that a loved one would get...it's only natural that "it" would love us back. Well done.

[Abraham George]

i wrote this to tease one of my real friend who was always chatting with girls over phone.
read morei wrote this to tease one of my real friend who was always chatting with girls over phone.

i never thing this will get such a huge positive response.

[Anjali]

Oh my God! The end, it is everything! It really caught me by surprise, and I was like, really?? But seriously, I liked it a lot!

[Najam Us Saher]

You see Abraham I am not the only one...😄
Anjali my reaction was the same. (Read my review on this poem)

[Anjali]

Well, what can I say? The poems are super good. Right? And yeah I read your review, I feel you.😂

[Najam Us Saher]

As you know I like reading sad poetry I was absorbed in my own feelings while I read this poem and the end was like 'Really...? You triggered my mind...'

[Anjali]

Yeah, In the starting, I was also like, it's full of deepness and sadness, and in the end, my mind just did a summersault.

[Abraham George]

i am honored. thanks for your lovely words both of my friends.

[Anjali]

No problem!!😊😊

[Abraham George]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Abrahamgeorge/1883695/#comment-4138325

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Abrahamgeorge/1895340/#comment-4138315

read these two writings and tell me whether you liked or not.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer.
"You keep me silent and
Kiss me many times as I know
I saw all your shame
But never mind the same"
I liked the above lines. Create thoughts and visions for the reader. A emotional ride in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Abraham George]

thanks coyote for your support

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed your work and you are welcome.

[Najam Us Saher]

Really...? What an interesting read. You've triggered my mind in confusion. I am speechless.

[Abraham George]

Thanks to know that you like it

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome

[Manu]

Quite an interesting write. I thought you wrote about a lover at first but then that closing line came and revealed everything. The ending had great punch and revelation.
Creatively and nicely written.

[Abraham George]

thanks for your valuable comments

[DIVYA]

I like the way the phone has been used to allude to a silent lover. Very creative indeed!

[Abraham George]

its inspired from my friends life. I wrote it actually for him

[MsJewel]

A few words seem out of place, but they don't take away from the meaning or the beauty of your words. Another enjoyable read. :) Julie

[Abraham George]

thanks for spending your valuable time for this .

[Diamond]

An interest poem. I liked the concept which began on a serious note and ended on a lighter one. You may want to break up with clear punctuation so it is easier to break the line and comprehend. Enjoyed it very much.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for finding little of your valuable time to read my writing. If you can please read my another poem named Alone

[Diamond]

Sure, I will do it. Is it so that you want me to critique it?

[Abraham George]

yes. so i can correct and make it perfect

[Isabella Ivy]

It's beautiful. Again there are some questionable places. Do you wish me to suggest them? I.I.

[Abraham George]

Yes sure. I need to correct it and make it perfect. Suggest . I am not that good in English. Please help

[Isabella Ivy]

I would be glad to, but it is difficult with poetry, as I might be unsure of your meaning. But I can suggest a few things. Line two, I think should say, 'listening to the lovely words'. Line 6 should say 'felt' instead of 'feel'. Line 16 instead of 'those' put 'this'. And a suggestion: try to cut back on the word 'you' in the first of the poem, as it is redundant. I hope this is helpful! Blessings :) I.I.

[Abraham George]

Thanks I will change

[Abraham George]

Changes made. Thanks for your help

[Isabella Ivy]

You're very welcome! You are a good poet :) Keep writing! I.I.

[Abraham George]

Thanks for your compliment.

[Isabella Ivy]

You're most welcome :) I'm sure in your language your work is flawless. English is hard. And its difficult to fix a poem just by putting in the right form of a word, once the poem is already written. But the more you do, the better you'll get. I have high hopes for your success! I.I.

[Isabella Ivy]

PS - I think lines 4 and 12 need to be reworked, still. (I would remove 'as you never' and the 'with you' and then I believe we will have gotten this as clean as we can without entirely starting over.) It's your poem though. You must do what you think best. This is just how it would make more sense in English. Smiles! I.I.