Morning Star

Morning Star

A Poem by Abraham George
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Dedicated to my dear friend i have here.

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Every morning I wake up to see my Morning star.

All stars in the sky are shining, but my star is not. All ‘cause of her love.

Once she loved a man from earth and her love was endless.

The man from earth, she treated as a god from heaven.

I can see my star is crying and those tears falling like rain

burning my heart without touching my skin.

Deep inside she have flaming scoria that she hides with her fake glittering smile.

Whenever she expresses her love, Silence was the only answer she got.

Need to wait or wanna forget, she doesn’t know.

Only thing she knows is that she can’t forget him.

My tears are shedding when I listen to the song she sings,

For him to listen, but I don’t know whether he listens.

The music of pure love, pain of bereavement- I heard like this

“Even if you sleeping in those beautiful dreams of us,

Forgetfulness is the medicine you found to cure my Love,

Our celestial love will shaken your rhythm of life.

Please come to me even as your heart only,

Fly with me like a humming bird

Fondle me with your feathers; we can live in the nest that

 I built in heaven using our loveable memories."

Her prayer will be answered even by the God Ebisu.

But why didn’t he? I will join in her prayer and let their celestial love wins,

‘Cause she is my morning star and my morning should be

filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart.


© 2017 Abraham George



Author's Note

Abraham George
show me my mistakes, let me correct it and make it perfect.

This is for a friend i have here and if that friend understand that it is for him/her, then i am happy.

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i really like the fact that you went across the universe with this poem.
can i just correct you on something?
you cannot write "But why didn't?", it can be "But why didn't he?" as in why didn't he answer her prayer.
And also, the last sentence kind of doesn't ring right. you could maybe change it to " Cause she is my morning star and my morning should be
filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart."


Posted 5 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Abraham George

5 Months Ago

thanks for the corrections.
Abraham George

5 Months Ago

corrected.



Reviews

There's something absolutely magical about stars. It's my favorite thing to write about :) This poem is my favorite right now. The last two lines are so beautiful. Well done, dear poet :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Abraham George

1 Month Ago

Its about my friend. thanks for your sweet comment
Very sweet and filled with true friendship sentiments. You express it all in a wonderful and endearing way...:)............

Posted 4 Months Ago


Abraham George

4 Months Ago

thanks for finding time to read my writings and valuable comments
Sami Khalil

4 Months Ago

You are welcome. ...:::))))
I loved this poem .. the stars in the Universe and lost love. A wonderful prayer for his morning star, which should indeed 'be filled with freshness and love due to her true smile from the bottom of her heart'. I hope his vigilance brings that about. I had to look up 'scoria'. What a wonderful word to describe that feeling that must be going on behind her 'fake glittering smile'. I wouldn't worry too much about mistakes, English is so different in different parts of the world. I could not actually see any mistakes, except that the tenses perhaps, get a bit jumbled? Lovely write.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abraham George

4 Months Ago

i am really honored . i really mean it. Love to read your review. inspirational.
I like how simple what you wrote is, yet it greatly grabbed my attention!
Well done xx

Posted 4 Months Ago


Abraham George

4 Months Ago

thanks. i am glad
beautifully phrased! just loved it!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abraham George

5 Months Ago

thanks and i wrote it about a friend i have here.
This comment has been deleted by the poster.
There was once a saying i read somewhere; When I look up to the stars it feels as if all my worries shrink down to size. This poem has a very in depth meaning!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abraham George

5 Months Ago

thanks for the comments.
Your friend is lucky to have a companion like you Abraham!
The poem you wrote is one of my favs.
The entire structure is great!
Good work!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abraham George

5 Months Ago

thanks for your good words
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Zoe
Aww, this so sweet. Najam would be very lucky to have such a supportive friend. Well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Zoe

5 Months Ago

Same here :)
Abraham George

5 Months Ago

Thanks Zoe. I am glad you like this.
Zoe

5 Months Ago

No worries
Output is really best when you are inspired of something or someone. That someone is very lucky on what you have wrote for her/him.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Wajiha Nayeem

5 Months Ago

hahaha okay mr.abraham george.
jazzymars

5 Months Ago

HELLO GUYS
Abraham George

5 Months Ago

yes my friend
This is truly such an amazing read!
You words hold emotions that were so real that I actually felt them, I hope your friend would read your fantastic words and see what a wonderful man and friend you are :)

Thank you for sharing your work.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abraham George

5 Months Ago

thanks bro.
Joey Nizz

5 Months Ago

Your welcome :)

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