Bon Voyage

Bon Voyage

A Poem by Abraham George
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Dedicated to one Friend

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Today morning, my star-

You’re looking more mature.

Oh my star! Bon voyage for-

Your next trip that starting today.

584 million miles around the sun.

Since you are my star I wish

To see you every morning so don’t

Stop travelling around the sun ever.

 

Like the sand through the hourglass,

So are the days of our lives.

Your age is just a number,
It’s really not all that big,
You have seen two decades,
Since you were just a kid.

You’re not a fallen angel, you’re

A star fell on this day years before.

 

A flower blossomed in late of spring.

Spreading it’s fragrance by words in strings.

Petals with emotions and feeling,

Dripping off as a drop of fire,

That can burn greenery in my heart.

I’m a greenskeeper- digging, planting

Pruning, trimming, and waiting for the

Beautiful smile of my flower

 

Let the candles that hold by the Cake

Brings the light to your life,

Light that will shine and can break through

Any glass, will bring you out of The Bowl.

Light guide us to those stones that-

Can be polished to a pure Diamond.

Let the light brings out the stones

In you ‘n’ let you live as a Diamond.

 

In this New Year I wish you all happiness.

For my beautiful dearest morning Star,

Wish you a Jumbled “Drippy Hay bath”


© 2017 Abraham George



Author's Note

Abraham George
HAPPY BIRTHDAY DEAR.
late of spring in southern Hemisphere i refer to November. Nov 15 is her birthday.
Point out the mistakes and help me to make this perfect please.

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Interesting poem.....though I'm a bit puzzled by the use of language at some places....

for instance... "today morning".....seems odd, even poetically. Poets can mix words around, but then it should still "sound well".

Then, using these words, directly from a soap opera,
"Like the sand through the hourglass,
So are the days of our lives"

I'd say is a bit cheesy.....lol... If a birthday poem is going to be special, I'd like someone to write original words, not use the words of others.

And lastly....I'm also not sure about the purpose of capital letters for cake, bowl, diamond and morning star.....the latter being a bit debatable, because if one refers to Venus or Sirius, it should be capitalized, though I'd say if I compare someone to just any star which shines in the morning, then "morning star" would suffice......

Posted 2 Months Ago


Abraham George

2 Months Ago

Thanks for the critics.
About the soap opera i will check because some lines were corrected b.. read more
That's a nicely written birthday poem. I like the way you referred to your friend, or your love, as "My Star."
However, I'm not sure I understand the last line.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Abraham George

2 Months Ago

That is Happy Birthday in jumbled form
So many wonderful lines to quote. Happy birthday to the subject of your poem and I think you admire her.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Abraham George

4 Months Ago

thanks for the comments.
Sami Khalil

4 Months Ago

Welcome..............
this is how is feel about my love. thanks for the nice poem.


Posted 5 Months Ago


Wow, I really enjoyed the way your wrote these lines, and I like how you keep referred to your (I'm guessing) friend or lover as "my star". Also I loved the lights "Light guide us to those stones that- Can be polished to pure Diamond", Love love love it :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Abraham George

5 Months Ago

Thanks for your comments. while i am writing this she was my friends but now she is my dearest frien.. read more
Beautifully written!
"Like the sand through the hourglass,
So are the days of our lives." That line made me giggle, I was thinking of "days of our lives" show.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Abraham George

5 Months Ago

thanks for your comments
Reading your poem made me think I knew her too. It's very beautiful. I can feel how much you treasure your friend and your friendship. Send her a belated from me. Love your piece.

-Cookie :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Abraham George

6 Months Ago

thanks for the comments.

You can tell her by your own
http://www.writerscafe.o.. read more
Najam Us Saher

6 Months Ago

Thank you very much Cookie :)
Amazing composition..! The way you express in words are beautiful :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Abraham George

6 Months Ago

thanks for the compliments
Its very good.please help me to become a better writer.i want a book of mine to be published one day.please help

Posted 6 Months Ago


Abraham George

6 Months Ago

i am also looking for a editor for my book
That was beautifully done! I really enjoyed reading your poem.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Abraham George

6 Months Ago

I wrote this to say Happy Birthday to my Friend and her name means "Morning Star". If you read my So.. read more

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