Deadly Illusion

Deadly Illusion

A Poem by Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

Throw your gaze to the wind.

Let there be no confusion.

My mad heart still can't take,

Love, The deadly illusion!

 

This death needs calm waters,

To rest its madness within,

My heart! A wounded sea,

The most infectious lesion.

 

Let wind soothe your beauty,

Your tears will find some solace.

As they burn both our hearts,

Weeping down your lilac face.

 

Don't deem this heartlessness,

A hurt rose fond of mourning,

There's an apocalypse,

'Neath every silent warning.

 

A man you seek, fine lady.

An ocean to hold your seas,

A place where all your seeds,

Will bloom into fruitful trees.

 

I can see the cluster,

Within your diamond eyes,

I feel your warm pulse,

Flaming my cherry-red prize

 

But now my waves are mad,

My wallow is rather deep

First dancing hurricanes,

Then on a disaster we’ll weep.


© 2013 Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-



Author's Note

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-
This was inspired by Sye, Noodlehead.

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Ahhhhh this is a refreshing write! From first stanza to last it it full of passion - and the boldness of your word choice is where you show it best. Your rhyming is sporadic which I like, as it is more tender and less so a children's rhym as couplets and such often sound! Some parts I had to reiterate to grasp the flow, but then nothing is ever read the same way twice so it's not a huge issue. :) "I can see the cluster within your diamonds eyes", I love this imagery in particularly. It reminds me of something I'd have written myself heehee. Keep up the good writing Adam, :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your outstanding review, Willow
I am much glad you liked it.



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Finally back on the site and this is one of the first I read. Seems like a different approach for what I've read from you. Amazing range you take on. Very nicely done

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love, The deadly illusion!

This single line says a lot. I love the entire piece, need I say more? :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Blue.
I am humbled.
A very interesting write from you, Adam. Your command of the language - which is your second language - is quite remarkable. You seem to be coming ahead in leaps and bounds. Great stuff!

(But should that be 'diamond' eyes?)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

Your comment and testimony have made my day, David.
Thank you very much.
And yes, it is... read more
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Reads all classical and s**t. All I know is gangsta rap

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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

But is that a good reason to insult other writings?
First dancing hurricanes,
Then on a disaster we'll weep

A very beautiful piece and actually the first of your work that I've read. I will have to stop by and read more. Well done!

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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

I am honored.
Please do so.
Love the imagery - job well done - Bravo

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Tarry.
I am much humbled.
Tarry Franck

3 Years Ago

My pleasure
Well written quatrains and good rhymes, solid work !

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Leslie.
I am much humbled.
I'm left with the impression of a wolf in sheep's clothing or a caliginous cloud warning of a storm about to come. There's a dark danger here that lurks beneath the surface about to come ashore like a tsunami.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

you cannot simply imprison the imagination of a reader and a poem can have millions of interpretatio.. read more
She is the youngest muse I've ever met; I'm not surprised to know that she inspired such an ambitious piece. I know how a mad heart feels, and I love your description of it. I could go on but I'd only be quoting the entire piece. I'll just say it was an obvious pick for my library. Great piece.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

She is indeed.
Thank you, I am much humbled.
this is beautifully written. you've done a great job here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

3 Years Ago

Thank you.
I am much glad you liked it.
Julianne

3 Years Ago

you're very welcome/

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Tags: deaddly, illusion, delusion, love, sye, noodlehead, gothic, pain, ocean

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