Silver necklace

Another love poem.

How hard …

 

it is to catch a glimpse

of mystical wonder

 

in these simple verses .

 

I took the little bottle of poison and I could have drank it to

the bottom, if you wouldn’t have stopped me when I reached the middle

to let you have the rest.

 

 

Shivers, like water

 

 

A frail wish

to understand this wicked spell cast over me.

 

Light shining,   

from within for you…

for us.

 

How much worth can a simple touch have…

 

to move the world

to move the

 

golden string between us

  

and make a moment last forever            ?  

 

What demon can make me want,

to keep you all to me                             ?  

 

to surrender my secrets…  

 

 

Grab my hand and don’t let go.

 

 

Reviews

[Ms Jessica Renee]

Such a whimsical feel to your words. The questions provoke the reader with every word. Exquisite work darlin' and I must say the verse,

"I took the little bottle of poison and I could have drank it to
the bottom, if you wouldn't have stopped me when I reached the middle to let you have the rest. "

Makes my own self shiver like water. It is a somber phrase but it has such a powerful effect on the emotions of the reader.

[huma]

intensely lovely, haunting

[Angelic Darkness]

I love your intense words, and you do weave a magical spell:).
This reminds me of a dark fairy tale. Keep up the good work..AD

[Mr Whiskers]

I really like this one in particular, it seeks to be known. Even though I know I've never read it before, it seems familiar because of the emotions and imags it invokes, for me at least. Definitely in my favs. Nice work.

[Leah Mayes]

I believe you capture the true essence of poetry and art in all of your writing, the soul is revealed in ink.. not for anothers amusement, but for the sake of expression. I truly felt your emotions as if my own, and that's what makes you a wonderful writer. I'll check back soon to see how many emotions you are willing to release in the future. do not for get the best of times.. and thank you for all your kind words.

[Jenny Davis]

This is beautiful! I love the setup of the piece as well as the carefully woven lines of passionate prose...
Lovely, lovely write :)

[xlynne]

i have to say i don't understand why its called silver necklace. and i don't understand if the part about poison is really right for this poem. b/c the way the poem is written, that part confuses me because i don't understand if they are taking the poison and she's thinking all the rest or its the other way around: she's just thinking that about the poison and really things are the way you described throughout the rest of it. i'm sorry if the way i described it is confusing. but all in all its a great poem b/c your writing has a very, as Jessica said: whimsical feel to it.

[Mel Stevens]

I wish I could write poems like you. They flow so effortlessly, and are worded so beautifully.

[Partha]

As Jessica said those two lines were especially powerful in this offbeat love poem. I liked the entire poem, an unique and unconventional way to write a love poem, which must be not easy but yet ended being a worthy poem to read.

[Periac]

a wonderful write images of yearning
"I took the little bottle of poison and I could have drank it to
the bottom, if you wouldn’t have stopped me when I reached the middle
to let you have the rest. "
so powerfully written.....great job