Flames

Gee he’s hot …

 

 

my greedy sinful heart skips a beat

at your voice killing the silence.

A million thoughts tempt me when my gaze bites you.

 

Baby baby

if you only knew

all the ways I want

to devour you,

you wouldn’t look

at me and

see the little angel

I appear to be.

 

Take me.

 

Quench my thirst and let us taste

love’s red red whine

caught up in one-another

lust for this wicked

game of passion.

 

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Adela,

A very nice poem full of passion.

Did you really intend in the last stanza to use "whine" rather than "wine"?

I thought I might suggest other changes in words and phraseology, but then paused and thought about it some more, and now I think your words are very carefully chosen, painting a very specific picture. For example I wondered about "my greedy sinful heart" and whether "sinful" belonged there, just as whether "wicked" belonged in "lust for this wicked / game of passion". But now I'm thinking that some sort of feeling of guilt belongs in there, a sort of remorse that you're actually in fact not "the little angel / I appear to be". That is in keeping with biting and devouring the man under your gaze.

Very nice write.

Best regards,

Rick

[Laoidhigh Uilleag]

Ooh wow :-) Definitely the undercover of an "innocent" woman. Loved the imagery it brought to my mind.

[Caramel Gold]

I like this...
"all the ways I want to devour you"
for some reason I like the word devour LoL
very sexy poem!

[MagiCrystal]

WOW... this is pure 100 % lust and well described the feelings and emotions of sexual desires hey ! I love it and it made me wonder what happen next!! LOL Magic. nice to met you and I will like to add you to my curiosity as a friend if you do not mind Please!! Magicrsytal...x0x

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Adela,

HOT HOT HOT...i felt it was scorching off the page, and loved it. Doesn't every guy like the angel turned vixen girl??

my greedy sinful heart skips a beat

at your voice killing the silence.

A million thoughts tempt me when my gaze bites you.


very intense intro, and a great piece from you. t hanks.

kena

[xlynne]

i thought this was a great poem! it was full of passion and lust. i loved your line "A million thoughts tempt me when my gaze bites you." that really stood out to me. the only thing i noticed is on the 15th line you wrote whine instead of wine. fantastic write!

[Kia]

i like this...very sensual yet tasteful at the same time. i have felt this way before

[Lia]

Great poem. x

[Angelic Darkness]

Loved these teasing stanzas, and quite erotic too.
I love this line: A million thoughts tempt me when my gaze bites you.

Such wicked words you weave...lol!! AD

[Nan]

You definitely call up the animal in all of us. Beautiful!
And just what i wanted to read today.

I sounds like a song to me? Do you write music too?
thanks for sharing, I enjoyed it very much.

Nan