Hate

Whnat I feel. What I want.

You

 

pierced my heart with your black chains

of arrogance and hate

 

poisoned my well of pure affection

with your lies and hidden filth  

 

made me lose my colors

 

You demon from hell!!

Give me my heart back

to give to the one I chose

 

and bring the light to kill the darkness.    

before you bleed me dry.  

 

Reviews

[Canvas]

Wow, I took this too many ways...

Could it be, just that your "love" stole your heart and left you with a poisoned well. You, enraged, call him out and demand your heart... however, the line "to give to the one I chose" changed the poem for me. If it is "chose," then that could refer to either a present "love" that you haven't been fully there for or it could refer to the "love" that had taken your heart... if it was the latter, then the first half of the poem was you speaking to "the demon," which possibly came from the first guy? If it had been "choose" then you are demanding your heart back and wanting the light to get rid of the demon so you are free to love without this essence holding you back. Either way, the last two lines, were a bit weird. The whole story is very dark and you are disgusted by the hurt caused, but yet you ask for "light" from it? It's a fantastic poem! I like being lost in a story, but I do like knowing what the writer thinks, please explain!

[Lexie James]

This is such a powerful poem. Each line tells a story and lets you feel the hurt, pain and anger. It's a feeling I'm sure many of us have felt. Fantastic piece, thank you for sharing.

[Simplicity]

I love the poem. Simply beautiful. The line "made me lose my colors" is insanely cool. Lost love, I wouldn't really know the feeling. But I still love.

Oh, and I am now an Atreyu fan, thanks to you! Haha.

[Anima Inspired]

Sadly...I know this feeling all too well... *sigh*

I love the line "made me lose my colors", because I think that basically sums up the entirity of lost love in my opinion...or rather love that has gone from good to bad. We humans have an uncanny ability when it comes to losing ourselves in the folds of love, and when this love is coming to an end, the paid, hatred and heartbreak come to the forefront.

This was well written...I love the way that you are able to capture the strength in a time of crisis. Beautifully written!

[Michael X]

Adela, You have a crafty style, the opening 3 lines shows the metaphorical detail, the care and thought
placed into every word, I really liked the way you began the emotional confliction, with sharp imagery

depicting a whipping chain that pierces the heart of subjugation, there is an overshadowing aspect that
is dark in its deliverence, the ability to draw the reader to depthful pondering state of emotions, the

reader finds an additional sense of poise accentuating the meaning with exclamation, the word layout
emanates the certainy in the voice, being projected with a sense of force and natural ability, reading

draws one to think about matters in life, and the balance of oppostion stepping with the same motion.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this Great poem, thanks.
Take Care, Mike

[KAREN BROWN]

wow very powerful write. sometimes people in life find the wrong one who destroys who we are and bring us down and changes how we really are to something we really don't want to be. I went threw this myself it can seems there the devil but you can get your heart back.I did a lot of prays ask the lord a lot of questions and received the strength i needed to get back my heart back and who i was.I fought the demands in my life its not easy but i wouldn't give up and faced it straight on .when I was younger i told my dad i hated this 1 person he told me god don't hate were all gods children and when i feel this way put forth the love in my heart to that person and i'd see them change how they are later in my life and i did and i seen this person change for the better weird but true.thank you for sharing with me. karen

[Mysty Rayn]

This poem is so different and great because of that. It was wonderful to read something of new light. Great job!

[Juan]

This put me in a good mood...um what I mean is that it's what we all feel at one time or another and this is kinda what I'm feeling right now if that makes any sense to you. Thanks for sharing and putting my emotions into words..lol

[Suki]

I like this its very dark and powerful

[Angelic Darkness]

This is dark, and yet love is suppose to be light..or is it...sometimes it
makes you wonder. AD