One more step in: “...So I volunteered to walk……

Continuation to my last prose "...So I volunteered to walk through the alleyway of her eyes !!" -- Yes, this is the 1st step into 'the efforts of knowing her pain' !

One more step in:

.....So I volunteered to walk through the alleyway of her eyes !!

Continuing from the last………

“Yes, I am an independent audience for her situations and I have volunteered to be her the closet spectator!"

It's a new morning ! The morning 'beams of new hopes' are just plummeting at the pavements of her eyelids. I wish ‘today she will regain her zeal and poignant with a new hope’…………..

But, What is happening to her? “she got up from her agonizing catnap....one more night has been ended !! ....She wanted to walk through the new-morning-rays, she failed !! She Walked, Stopped, Walked, Stopped…..and again Walked, then Stopped again………….!!” 

Her poignant strides are now ceasing her backward…………..her hesitant strides have undoubtedly symbolized an immense dilemma or a fear within her? I could feel that ‘Her mind is ruling her heart today, which she never wanted' !!

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I heard ~ “She is a worshiper of dreams, love and beauty. She is a symbol of hope and ardor. She walks on the cloud of her dreams, love is in each beat of her heart and beauty is always reflected in her easing eyes! She radiates the positive energy each time her lips make the beautiful curve” !!

But today? She is not that girl! Her thoughts have defeated her radiant smiles; It seems that she has lost herself in some distant abscond and her condition has forced me to imagine ~  ‘The blossoming petals have been dried with ceasing hopes’ !!

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Something is holding her rear, for sure !  I think I have to wait till her strides cross this gloomy aura of her fear…….!!"

 

………….to be continued !!

 

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With a promise to dream-in again ~ Adi

 

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The character in the poem is putting itself in the place of the other person to know what that other person is going thru.

The characters also states that is not expecting something in return. The character is worried and wants the other person to gain the strength to face a new day.

From here
"Her poignant strides are now ceasing her backward…………..her hesitant strides have undoubtedly symbolized an immense dilemma or a fear within her?"

Is as if the character is saying that persons who long suffer before death are more sustant to take fear with them to the other world, because those could be waiting to arrest them while in agony and at death to take them to jail in the other side of the world.

Something like if you fall asleep and they kidnap you and you wake up in a whole different place because of criminals.

[ADITYA (Deep)]

hey thanks for your nice review................thank u so much for spending time on this piece and realizing the character .......................!!

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Hmm...it's like....someone is absolutely going out of comfort level and still in the hope to grip victory no matter how much the percentage of being defeated increases......
Her changes at the middle of poem is well expressed to understand rather can feel!
I hope you'll keep fulfilling the promise of dream - in again!
Splendid write😊

[ADITYA (Deep)]

Hey thanks... Your version of understanding is quite aligning with the core...thanks for your words.
I hope u read thru the 1st one of this prose as well....i.m sure u will better connect again :),
Thanks.

[Prritiy]

again the write is heart - touching one, though pain is evident. written nicely.

[ADITYA (Deep)]

Thanks, it was try to feel someone's pain...... !!

[Prritiy]

you felt it for sure, it shows.

[ADITYA (Deep)]

This is in continuation to my last writing "......so I volunteered to walk........" !
So I believe, the flow and essence of this prose could be better understood if the 1st one is read before this................ Cheers !!