Where are you now, Son?

Where are you now, Son?

A Poem by Agnibo
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A betrayed father's words to his son.

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   Son, I taught you to walk.
   Holding my finger you'd pace,
   And, then we'd start to race,
   But where are your hands now?
   When I need them to walk?
  
  Son, I taught you to talk.
   Seeing my lips you'd speak,
   And, then my joy'd reach its peak.
   But where are you now?
   When I need you just to have a talk?

© 2017 Agnibo



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Heart touching words..written beautifully... :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Very very beautiful. It's small but very deep and emotional. Nicely done :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Agnibo

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Luna. :) Thanks for reading.
Very touching write. Evoked a delicate emotion.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Agnibo

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much! :)
I am glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.
The fourth line needs an 'r' to make you into 'your'. This is an understandable poem and I have asked these questions myself. Good share. I.I.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Agnibo

9 Months Ago

Thank you a lot for correcting it, Isabella. :)
Thank you!
Isabella Ivy

9 Months Ago

Keep up the goood work!
Agnibo

9 Months Ago

Thank you! :) I will. Do keep reviewing my poems the way you do. Your reviews are really helpful. :)
I liked the tones and the honesty of these words. I'm old school. We must repaid the parent and the Grandparent who formed and shaped us. The poem had a sad ending. Some children learn too late. They were loved by great people and did not repay the kindness and love received. Thank you Aganibo for sharing the amazing poetry. Great wisdom can be learn in the words.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


I loved the lines. Very heartfelt, but I don't think we should ever make our parents feel like that.
Its the busy life that we cannot avoid these things happening yet try to keep them happy.
Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Agnibo

9 Months Ago

Yes, we should never make them feel like that. :) They are the ones who spend half of their lives ta.. read more
Very heart touching. It shows the grim reality of life how children don't value their parents when they grow old. Thanks for sharing such a true poem.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Agnibo

9 Months Ago

I am happy that you could relate to it. :) Thanks for reading.
And, you are welcome, Najam. .. read more
Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

You're welcome too... ☺
A moving, if somewhat short piece. But saying that, you did bring across to the reader about how a father now needs his son and within those few words the message was touching.

Mark.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Agnibo

9 Months Ago

I am really glad that you could relate to it. Yes, that exactly what I wanted to express through my .. read more
matrixmark

9 Months Ago

Happy to have read it.

Mark.
The theme is good. It would've been better if the poem was a little longer.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Agnibo

9 Months Ago

Yes, right! I should have written it a little longer. I will rewrite it, may be.
Thanks for r.. read more

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Agnibo
Agnibo

Assam, India



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Hello! I am Agnibo Chakrabory. I am from India. I am a wanna be poet and novelist. I love Composing poems of various forms. Amoung my favourite poems, I love the poem, "Don't stant at my grave and wee.. more..

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