Where are you now, Son?

A betrayed father's words to his son.

   Son, I taught you to walk.
   Holding my finger you'd pace,
   And, then we'd start to race,
   But where are your hands now?
   When I need them to walk?
  

  Son, I taught you to talk.
   Seeing my lips you'd speak,
   And, then my joy'd reach its peak.
   But where are you now?
   When I need you just to have a talk?

Reviews

[shabiyaswati]

Heart touching words..written beautifully... :)

[Luna]

Very very beautiful. It's small but very deep and emotional. Nicely done :)

[Agnibo]

Thank you so much, Luna. :) Thanks for reading.

[Diamond]

Very touching write. Evoked a delicate emotion.

[Agnibo]

Thank you so much! :)
I am glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.

[Isabella Ivy]

The fourth line needs an 'r' to make you into 'your'. This is an understandable poem and I have asked these questions myself. Good share. I.I.

[Agnibo]

Thank you a lot for correcting it, Isabella. :)
Thank you!

[Isabella Ivy]

Keep up the goood work!

[Agnibo]

Thank you! :) I will. Do keep reviewing my poems the way you do. Your reviews are really helpful. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the tones and the honesty of these words. I'm old school. We must repaid the parent and the Grandparent who formed and shaped us. The poem had a sad ending. Some children learn too late. They were loved by great people and did not repay the kindness and love received. Thank you Aganibo for sharing the amazing poetry. Great wisdom can be learn in the words.
Coyote

[Manasa.L]

I loved the lines. Very heartfelt, but I don't think we should ever make our parents feel like that.
Its the busy life that we cannot avoid these things happening yet try to keep them happy.
Thanks for sharing :)

[Agnibo]

Yes, we should never make them feel like that. :) They are the ones who spend half of their lives taking care of us. So, we should look after them when they need us, too.
Thanks for reading. :)
And, you are welcome, Manasa. :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Very heart touching. It shows the grim reality of life how children don't value their parents when they grow old. Thanks for sharing such a true poem.

[Agnibo]

I am happy that you could relate to it. :) Thanks for reading.
And, you are welcome, Najam. 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome too... ☺

[matrixmark]

A moving, if somewhat short piece. But saying that, you did bring across to the reader about how a father now needs his son and within those few words the message was touching.

Mark.

[Agnibo]

I am really glad that you could relate to it. Yes, that exactly what I wanted to express through my piece.
Thanks for reading, Mark. :)

[matrixmark]

Happy to have read it.

Mark.

[Long Whispers]

The theme is good. It would've been better if the poem was a little longer.

[Agnibo]

Yes, right! I should have written it a little longer. I will rewrite it, may be.
Thanks for reading. :)