The Parented Orphan

The parented orphan

 

Five fingers wrap around her dress      

not letting her go ahead         

pulling her back with all her might     

asking her not to go away

With gestures she proved      

cause she couldn’t say   

that she hated being left this way

This sad scene I watched until I said,

no mother can be this way                             

in spite of the kid not having a leg

doesn’t mean she can be left far away

A big bag she hung over her head             

filled with money till the neck

Handing the bag to the maid     

she said, don’t send her back any day

feed her, hit her, play with her                   

but don’t let her know she came from where

The mothers dress the baby left          

and she then walked away     

she opened the door and entered the car

and drove till she was far ahead

Her daughter she saw           

holding the maid                

standing by the bay               

in front of the orphanage

She saw her year old daughter yell

through the mirror on the car frame

On which it read ‘things are closer than they may appear’                   

looking at her daughter a wave hit her 

                                         

Things shouldn’t have been this way     

it still can be changed don’t waste this day       

she said to herself as she hit the break

turning the car once again

She drove back to the orphanage

to make things fine she hugged her child

and thanked god for preventing a great big crime

From the side I watched feeling good once again   

as I trusted god that no mom could be this way. 

 

 

-         Ahena MK  

Author's Note

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Reviews

[mahima]

A very touching poem!!!!!

[Rita L. Sev]

A sad tale with a hopeful end, Ahena. Nicely penned.

[Ahena MK]

Glad you liked it ....
Ahena

[Tam Warink]

I feel like it's good that sometimes the poems, the stories have endings that are not so dismal and hopeless. Of course I loved the ending best of all. Only minor grammar glitches and not worth mentioning with all things being considered. Also, there is/was the classic form of a story in this too and well formed. Nicely done, Ahena.

100 happy endings

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading .....
ahena

[Frieda P]

The unconditional love of a mother doesn't care about limbs, only the flesh and blood she delivered, glad you ended on an upbeat Ahena.

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading...
ahena

[Odysseus Wanders]

i feel great by the end... but heart break along the way... stirs up all kinds of emotions, makes me think and feel those things and events in my life... there were many, more than the stars on a clear night... so i find in the reading my courage. I find my own hurt and abandon... for I have many such creatures. So its good I feel these things, there are part of me, part of my life... and your poem also warns of the danger in "... it shouldn't have been this way..." , it easy to get caught in that dream, but she looks in the mirror, things are closer than they appear... means for me... But is IS this way. Now deal with it. Take care of it. Love it... whatever it is- if its your child.. so be it. If its your poetry... so be it. If its your work... so be it. But what even it is... pain n all, hurt n all, abandon n all, except it. love it. let it be.... Let It Be. Your poem was clearly very inspirational to me.
Thank you for being you.

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!! thanks for deeply reading the poem.... and thanks for the wonderful review
ahena

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is very heartfelt.There are things we don't expect that mother's will do to hurt their kids beacuse they are after all mothers but not everyone that gives birth can be called a mother as life shows us.

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading
ahena

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome:)

[writ rajat]

a very good poem with bundle of every emotional thought

[Ahena MK]

Glad you liked it...
Ahena

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Again a great idea...but if I were you...I would improve on the language

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for the review...

[Praveeta]

A very emotional poem addressing issues in our society. You have done an excellent job of creating a lovely piece.

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

"On which it read ‘things are closer than they may appear’
looking at her daughter a wave hit her "
A very sad poem. I'm glad they are places for woman to drop off children. Here in Michigan. It isn't a crime to drop off your baby at a fire station, police station or hospital. A baby is better off elsewhere than the mother who doesn't want the child. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry..
Coyote

[Ahena MK]

Thanks coyote for reading...