Romeo And Juliet

Romeo And Juliet

A Poem by Ajgirl99
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Love, Heartbreak.

"
   His face is cold,
His lips are blue,
Dear, Lord please say,
It isn't true.
   I've lost my mind,
He's lost his life.
Now in my hands,
I hold a knife.
   A wound in my chest,
My pain fades away.
All of this started,
On a beautiful day.

© 2013 Ajgirl99



Author's Note

Ajgirl99
I apologize if it isn't good. And comments and suggestions are welcome. Even criticism. Thank you.

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I have no words.......my voice is in my awe!! (wrong play- lol- but same author). Brilliant! Well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is fantastic. i love it. Full of romance but dark at the same time. Great write, Thanks for sharing your poetic talents.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I adore the way you make you rhymes look effortless!!! My poems are getting better but still don't rhyme that well

Posted 5 Years Ago


This was really good(: Best out of all i've read of yours! Great job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Once I heard a good Irish quote:

" You live, and die on the same day-

You live and die on the same day- "

You dear poet, had me with this.
Remembering the fact is so true.

Beautiful.

E.L.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved this poem :) you described their situation perfectly! I was a little confused at the line; Dear, Lord please say.
I might have said; Dear Lord, please say. But that's just me! Anyway, another beautiful poem with nice imagery, thank-you! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good write. Captures the scene. You should listen to "don't fear the reaper" by blue oyster cult. That song has to do with situations like this kinda. Great write

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought it was extremely good.......Whisk

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very good, nothing to apologize for. I love the rhyming you use, and the shortness of the lines. I can see Juliet. Great job.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 18, 2012
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My name is Ansley. I am sixteen years old. I am not all that great at writing, but I am trying to improve. The first five poems that I have listed are from when I was in the ninth grade going back.. more..

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