Happy To Know You Still Care

Happy To Know You Still Care

A Poem by Akshat♥
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You can't predict anything in life...

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Most Beautiful music in the world is your own heartbeat.

It gives an assurance that you will survive 
even when the whole world leaves you alone...
and my heartbeat is you

Starting phase of love begins with friendship
and keeping a friend is as difficult as losing one
you sacrifice a lot to keep them.

I may not have sacrified enough for you..
but in my heart I swear am keeping you

Once I wish to have a key to your heart
now I have the heart but the key is lost forever...

We had a fight
We stop talking to each other

Days pass by
I still feel the sense of your touch
How you make me smile
Now those days are over...

We always fight about stupid things
and regret later..

We always feel sorry
and do it again

On my birthday you gave me a rose
and said goodbye..
I was so stupid to think for
one second you actually cared..

© 2013 Akshat♥


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It would be more inviting to know who this poem is for, but whoever it was lost a valuable friend --anyone who understands that "the most beautiful music is a heartbeat and that heartbeat is for you" would be a good friend indeed. This poem has a nice flow and is SO well written. Thanks, and excellent work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Beautiful...

Posted 12 Years Ago


it made me cry ....Beautiful music in the world is your own heartbeat.

"It gives an assurance that you will survive
even when the whole world leaves you alone...
and my heartbeat is you

Starting phase of love begins with friendship
and keeping a friend is as difficult as losing one
you sacrifice a lot to keep them.

I may not have sacrified enough for you..
but in my heart I swear am keeping you

Once I wish to have a key to your heart
now I have the heart but the key is lost forever..."
this part of your best was Brilliant , ending may need some working on ..
just keep following your thread ...
first poem to make me cry for long while, if ever,.. Great great first half!



Posted 12 Years Ago


wow really good, and so sad. But just because they say goodbye doesn't mean they didn't care. Sometimes goodbye is the kindest thing a person can say. A clean cut vrs. killing you slowly.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked the beginning, but as the poem continued, i felt that you needed to show more and tell less.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well, there is my answer then...I still care. This poem put a heavy weight in my chest. Certainly words that many people can relate to. Nicely done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow... this is soo beautiful! very descriptive and well written. My most favorite part: Once I wish to have a key to your heart
now I have the heart but the key is lost forever... that part really caught my attention. Very beautiful:) Keep writing


Posted 12 Years Ago


Greatly written... the spun web of emotions is brilliant.
The words were beautifully chosen.
Great write.....
on second note.. the pics were really cool.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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To be brutally honest, it is superb. Probably not what you're expecting. You may be expecting people to comment on grammar, or typo's or who knows what, but it tansfixed me from first to last. I became lots in the sadness of your words, and the ending was a true killer. Wonderful job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This was really good. I like the pics. It sure does go with the theme of the poem. Also it feels good to know someone still cares about you in this cruel world.

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow, so filled with love. Turning it to dissapointment in the end, This is wonderful.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Akshat♥
Akshat♥

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