when it's this good . . .

when it's this good . . .

A Poem by alan khan

when you wake up and the sun shines through gentle thick

rain drops.

 

 

when the rainbow casts its magic wave

across the warmth of your bedroom.

 

 

when you look in the mirror and see what your lover sees,

 

and can feel the light taking over

the chopped dusty breath.

trapped in the lungs

you've infested.

 

 

 

 

when you can speak with beautiful notes

of bliss.

 

 

when the rage and monster

you've grown used to being

slave to

 

is no longer able

to wrap the leash

round the throat.

 

and you break. through.

 

 

 

 

when the words locked away in the tips

of your fingers.

floods away across a page without your consent.

 

 

when the muscles

wrapped around your bones

work in perfect wonderful order

 

and you are able to perform those duties

you only can in 

dreams.

 

 

 

when the world is in love with you.

 

 

 

when it's this good...

you know it's lasting for all of

three seconds.

 

so why not grab hold and enjoy it.


© 2010 alan khan



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Brilliant writing! Thoughts, feelings set in touching words.

In spite of this being gentler than much of your writing, this has raw impact on the reader: ' when the muscles - wrapped around your bones - work in perfect wonderful order '

Love it .. and don't doubt the world the world would love this writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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While the first several lines are of dreamy and fairytale approach, the ending sure did shatter those. Reality is truly reflected in this piece but with it, you also give hints of hope and wishfulness. It's an inspiring piece of art.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow, this is fantastic! Lol, I don't know why I'm surprised, you've got serious talent, obviously, but each time I read something, it just blows me away. Fantastic.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brilliant writing! Thoughts, feelings set in touching words.

In spite of this being gentler than much of your writing, this has raw impact on the reader: ' when the muscles - wrapped around your bones - work in perfect wonderful order '

Love it .. and don't doubt the world the world would love this writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great wisdom in your words. We need to hold on to the good times. Your description and story was outstanding. I like your ending a lot.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Tags: happy, bliss, sun, rainbow, love, gentle, good

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alan khan
alan khan

Mint Hill, NC



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