Pegs

Harley suggested I write a poem about a legless albino porcupine....So I did!

There once lived an albino porcupine by the name of Pegs.
Pegs had no friends; Pegs had white legs.
Pegs lived all alone in a den by the seashore.
She never played with others; she was quite the bore.
But little did they know, by daylight, Pegs sharpened her quills.
At nighttime she shot them at rabbits for thrills.
Into her den, she dragged the dead beasts.
Gnawing from flesh to the bone, she had such lovely feasts.
The blood from the rabbits began to stain her white fur.
She then noticed it was now far from pure.
Deep inside, maniacal thoughts began to stir..
While playing a game of solo chess,
Peg began to crave the bloody taste of flesh.
She peaked outside, but saw no rabbits for miles.
In the corner of her den were only stripped bone piles.
She gnawed upon a few until she felt a sharp pain.
It grew stronger and stronger and made her insane.
She then woke up from her awful nightmare,
and realized she had eaten her own legs; flesh, bone, and hair.
Pegs was distraught at the bloody mess that she saw.
She started to scream, then she started to bawl.
No one came running to comfort Pegs.
For Pegs had no friends, and now Pegs had no legs.

Reviews

[GunMetal]

This was akin to a nursery rhyme, where it is presented with a lighthearted nature, but has a rather dark undertone. Maybe undertone isn't the right word, because the macabre descriptions are pretty clear. What gets me is that I thought this was going to be a cute story, but then you turn the tables when Pegs starts murdering rabbits. What I find most disturbing is that Pegs eats the rabbits, when porcupines are primarily herbivores, which may or may not have led to her insanity at the end, when she starts eating her own legs. That being said, I enjoyed this piece very much. It was dark, surprising, and though I wouldn't say it was funny, it was humorous because of it's presentation. I also can't way I felt any pity for Pegs at the end there. She was obviously a sociopath (in my interpretation).

[Molly]

This was quite dark but I liked it. It had a cutesy-creepy feel to it.
I liked how you tied it up at the end so it reconnected with the beginning.

[DESTROYA]

i really like it! kind of freaked me out. great ending

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

Poor Pegs! That was quite quite a vivid dream eh? :D Great write

[The Empty Hour Glass]

I don't know why (maybe I'm just a little screwed up, like most people) but this made me laugh. A lot. Line 20 especially. Great, humorous, demented piece of poetry!

[Iris Eve Baynard.]

wow.... all i can say is that this is amazing :) enjoyed the write :)

[Lina Grey]

I would read this to small children. It is hilarious and the consistent rhyming makes it almost like a nursery rhyme. Unfortunately the children's parents might not appreciate the ghoulish fun in this, and they might not let me near their children. I tend have that effect on people sometimes. C'est le vie, I suppose. It's a wonderful write. Thank you.

[Alana McGuire]

Hahah! Thank you greatly for your review. I enjoyed it. :)

[Little Birdie]

Honestly one of the best poems I read lately, hilarious in a dark way but then again pretty sad on the other. Your rhythm and rhyming are very, very fluent and everything made perfect sense to me and even invoked some giggles, ah. I love it. Definite new favourite.

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you so very much for the great review! I'm not used to rhyming, writing short poems, or humorous poems, but this was a fun challenge. :)

[Little Birdie]

You're very welcome, you certainly tackled that challenge. :)

[Alrick]

:O ohh dear... very good poem, but shockingly sad at the end!

[No Longer in use]

A dark kind of funny. I love it!

[MaxRideFan]

This is a bit too.... horrible for me. But at least you didn't go into detail with the bloody legs!