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Make Sure You値l Say Goodbye


A Poem by Ian
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It's the end... or not?
"

One less second, one more gone

They’re leaving, no come back

Tic ‘n toc they won’t stop

Silently the time will come

 

And we’re drifting away [Wasting away]

With every second that goes by

We wish we could stop [Escape from the time]

Don’t let me leave just yet

 

And we pray to the Lord

For angels to keep us safe

In this road out of the world

Let’s all walk to the light

 

And we’re drifting away [Wasting away]

With every second that goes by

We wish we could stop [Escape from the time]

Don’t let me leave just yet

 

Goodbye to the world [Goodbye, goodbye]

Goodbye to the world [Goodbye, goodbye]

Goodbye to the world [Goodbye, goodbye]

Goodbye to the world


ゥ 2009 Ian



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I think this is beautifully written. I really like the use of the red lines and how they stand out in their own way but also fit in so well with the rest of the lyrical poem/song. The only thing that caught my attention was "They're leaving, no come back"....The last part is a little awkward to read. Should it be that none come back?
Good Write.


Happy Writing.

=YourMidnightSecret=

Posted 6 Months Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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