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The Wind In My Face Feels So Good


A Poem by Ian
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Falling into the void...
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Feathers falling from nowhere

Soaring high in the sky with paper wings

You’ll never see two stars fall alike

 

I’m erratic, with no course, feeling lost

Searching for vacancy where there’s not

 

My sight now failing, these goddamned clouds

Crashing into mountains, my deepest fear

And even when I’m flying, I keep falling

When there’s no reason to keep rising

 

You whispered this lie way too many times

Now that I’ve returned the favor you feel so fragile

The wings have become your personal demon

 

I’m erratic, with no course, feeling lost

Searching for vacancy where there’s not

 

My sight now failing, these goddamned clouds

Crashing into mountains my deepest fear

And even when I’m flying, I keep falling

When there are reasons to make you fall

 

For sure, you are still an easy target

There are thousands of ways to fall

But only one way to rise from the ashes

 

I’m erratic, with no course, feeling lost

Trying to fly when I know I have no wings

 

Falling faster into the void, cars’ headlights blind me

Falling faster into the void, this is my last fall

Falling faster into the void, I never learned to fly

Falling faster into the void, will you ever catch me?


© 2009 Ian



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this is pretty good.
the first stanza has great imagery- i could picture it as i read along perfectly. and it really pulled me in to read

there were some 'off' words for descriptions used. they didn't fit with the whole piece. and then somewhere in the middle of this u lost me and it felt like some examples didnt tie into it.

overall, as it stands now, this lacks that AWE or WOW factor but i see its potential and with a little better grasp on language and what does and doesn't work, your writing will greatly improve.
good job.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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