Quadrilateral

Quadrilateral

A Poem by Alessander

Your tears are so light
Like cheetah paws over puddles
Tepid and quick
Below ivory moons

And your hands though small
Massive on my chest
Each finger
A Stonehenge slab

Your words don’t quite reach
Muffled like some ancient wind
Low and distant
Falling off the Himalayas

But the ache is intimate
Like burning sage spreading
Touching every empty corner
O ashen holiness

Smoldering inside

© 2018 Alessander



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The way you've described the fingers does make me think of Stonehenge and I see them creating that circle over the heart. Willing something magical to happen. But this feels like breaking up to me. The tears, the muffled words that sound distant as though disbelieving and blocking. But the image of the fingers makes me believe that these small hands want to re-ignite a fire. Just my feelings from this... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Year Ago

Very insightful review. This is indeed a "break up poem" and for some reason all those things went t.. read more
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1 Year Ago

Yeah, you're crazy. :). The mad poet!
You're welcome, it's my pleasure. Good to read you a.. read more



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"Like burning sage spreading
touching every empty corner,
O ashen holiness"

that is just wonderful........dana

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Year Ago

oh, hey stranger! Glad you stopped by :)

Thanks. Happy it caught your eyes.
I sometimes am gobsmacked reading you, this is like a tearing separation, the lament is so palpable yet reads like honey if it wasn't laced with such a depth of what seems sorrow, you are one hell of a writer :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Year Ago

You're too kind , Poppy.
Thanks for reading my scribblings
Vivid imagery! I loved the comparison of fingers like stonehenge...reminded me of peine forte et dure (a poem I've read recently) delicate but torturous. Your words choices are remarkable and phrasing precise. I enjoyed this. R xo

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

2 Months Ago

Thanks for checking it out.
Have to read that piece you mentioned.
The way you've described the fingers does make me think of Stonehenge and I see them creating that circle over the heart. Willing something magical to happen. But this feels like breaking up to me. The tears, the muffled words that sound distant as though disbelieving and blocking. But the image of the fingers makes me believe that these small hands want to re-ignite a fire. Just my feelings from this... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Year Ago

Very insightful review. This is indeed a "break up poem" and for some reason all those things went t.. read more
Closed

1 Year Ago

Yeah, you're crazy. :). The mad poet!
You're welcome, it's my pleasure. Good to read you a.. read more
~ perhaps nothing matters more than that "ache"... ~ very interesting array of unique images... and the title seems like an ode to the geometry of human dimensions... (physical and psychological)...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

2 Months Ago

god, I feel bad now seeing this. RIP serah.
you will be missed.

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Added on December 13, 2016
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Alessander
Alessander

Los Angeles, CA



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In honor of Valentines, gonna 'publish' all my romantic pieces, the good, the bad and the ugly. May have read some, other lesser known ones like "Confessions of a Chubby Chaser", "Terrain" , "Bride.. more..

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