The way you've described the fingers does make me think of Stonehenge and I see them creating that circle over the heart. Willing something magical to happen. But this feels like breaking up to me. The tears, the muffled words that sound distant as though disbelieving and blocking. But the image of the fingers makes me believe that these small hands want to re-ignite a fire. Just my feelings from this... :)
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2 Years Ago
Very insightful review. This is indeed a "break up poem" and for some reason all those things went t.. read moreVery insightful review. This is indeed a "break up poem" and for some reason all those things went through my mind. I know. I'm crazy.
Thanks for the very astute words my friend.
2 Years Ago
Yeah, you're crazy. :). The mad poet!
You're welcome, it's my pleasure. Good to read you a.. read moreYeah, you're crazy. :). The mad poet!
You're welcome, it's my pleasure. Good to read you again.
I sometimes am gobsmacked reading you, this is like a tearing separation, the lament is so palpable yet reads like honey if it wasn't laced with such a depth of what seems sorrow, you are one hell of a writer :)
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2 Years Ago
You're too kind , Poppy.
Thanks for reading my scribblings
Vivid imagery! I loved the comparison of fingers like stonehenge...reminded me of peine forte et dure (a poem I've read recently) delicate but torturous. Your words choices are remarkable and phrasing precise. I enjoyed this. R xo
Posted 2 Years Ago
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1 Year Ago
Thanks for checking it out.
Have to read that piece you mentioned.
The way you've described the fingers does make me think of Stonehenge and I see them creating that circle over the heart. Willing something magical to happen. But this feels like breaking up to me. The tears, the muffled words that sound distant as though disbelieving and blocking. But the image of the fingers makes me believe that these small hands want to re-ignite a fire. Just my feelings from this... :)
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Very insightful review. This is indeed a "break up poem" and for some reason all those things went t.. read moreVery insightful review. This is indeed a "break up poem" and for some reason all those things went through my mind. I know. I'm crazy.
Thanks for the very astute words my friend.
2 Years Ago
Yeah, you're crazy. :). The mad poet!
You're welcome, it's my pleasure. Good to read you a.. read moreYeah, you're crazy. :). The mad poet!
You're welcome, it's my pleasure. Good to read you again.
~ perhaps nothing matters more than that "ache"... ~ very interesting array of unique images... and the title seems like an ode to the geometry of human dimensions... (physical and psychological)...
Posted 2 Years Ago
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1 Year Ago
god, I feel bad now seeing this. RIP serah.
you will be missed.