Phonograph (audio)

Phonograph (audio)

A Poem by Alessander
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She is beautiful and broken
In my youth
My pride would never allow
For me to fall
To her, for her, in her


I would’ve dumped her
At the first sign
Of weakness
Of manic giggles and cut marks
bandages, brands and bruises
Of pills and poetry


I was like Hitler
Crushing delinquent passions
Under iron boot
Slapping gypsy kisses
Gassing gaunt pulses


But I aged into empathy
Like a baseball glove
Pounded and weathered
Contoured to love


I was all passion and will
The perfect tyrant
But now a metronome
Tick keeps me even-keeled
Within acceptable range
Without the interludes
Of the damned or the deranged


But who needs that?
Old men throwing crumbs from benches
Perhaps, hunched over and cold
Always cold and aching
From ancient fractures of foolishness
From distant passions
From ghostly wounds and illness


I am not that. I am no scarecrow
Not quite. Some wise sage
Ascending onto celestial petals
Ethereal rays pure and bright
My blood still yearns
It still toils, howls and burns
For her, even now, it longs

For a broken phonograph

To play our song


© 2017 Alessander



Author's Note

Alessander
Here's me reading it.



Song." Saeta". Gil Evan's version.

Lemme know if you like the print or rec version better. Always curious about that dynamic. Thxs!

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"I would’ve dumped her
At the first sign
Of weakness
Of manic giggles and cut marks
bandages, brands and bruises
Of pills and poetry"

That was one hell of a stanza, Al! In all, this was really strong in how you wove imagery with a consistent flow to tell a narrative. Awesome work, man.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

3 Days Ago

Thank, man

Glad you dug it!

Cool new avi, btw



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incredible. the way you were able to compile this in a sensible timeline was really good man. Amazing description, very moving.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great job - excellent repetition. The mood and tone is set up well with the lean lines and rhythms. Still very muscular. I think you can make it even more taut, a few exposition-y lines especially the last two stanzas.

the last line break is a bit melodramatic. Fold it in the with the rest of your prev. stanza, let the line breaks and sentence structure create that impact for you, not the spacing.

Well done, regards!

Posted 1 Month Ago


....W..O...W... stunning writing .... just describes perfectly how we change our views on life as we mature but you captured it with powerful emotion.
Ascending onto celestial petals..... absolutely magnificent!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can't explain in how many ways I was captivated by this. It gave me goosebumps. 'But now a metronome
Tick keeps me even keeled Within acceptable range. Without the interludes' my favorite liines. Amazing.

Posted 1 Month Ago



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