The moaner

The moaner

A Poem by Alessander

She knows little of life
Thinks her kisses are ambrosia
But must google ambrosia
Flowers without roots

Petals in the wind
are merely that. Transient
Like her words. One day blooming
The next rotting by sewers

She does not know this yet
But she will suffer immensely
I've seen those crazed eyes before
In picasso paintings and McCarthur Park w****s

The greatest tragedy is pretending
To understand. Feigning feelings
It's like f*****g a ghost
Drinking 3 day old coke

Empty and bitter - once perhaps sweet
But vanity and lust rust the chrome
Off a soul. Better to scrape it off
With a serrated knife, corroded love





© 2018 Alessander



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I like these lines, "vanity and lust rust the chrome
Off a soul. Better to scrape it off
With a sharp knife" It reminds me of something Marilyn Monroe said about herself once..." I'm like one of those paper Chinese dragons they have in their New Year's parade...you know? All fragile looking and colorful on the outside and just kind of empty inside." Sounds like an apropos comparison to the girl in your poem. Good reading.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Month Ago

Love that quote from Marilyn. She was a lot smarter than ppl thought (like Betty Page).

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I love this piece about the illusion of depth in young beauty or young love. It's true wisdom that can see through it. I loved the line mocking her for looking up "ambrosia." I also loved your alliteration in the line reading "lust rust" how great to pair these up in your sharp daggers over her youthful, disillusioned facade. Love this commentary!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Alexa Apothic Red

1 Month Ago

Thank you! Apothic Red is one of my favorite wines... I am glad to review your works and look forwar.. read more
Alessander

1 Month Ago

A Wine, Really? I love "Apothic Red" - seems almost mythic - or like a badass supervillain name lol<.. read more
Alexa Apothic Red

1 Month Ago

lol good line "stainless steel women" you should use that!... and I really like your take on the win.. read more
This is a gem and I was lucky to find it today. You really painted a colorful picture here with your unapologetic insight.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Month Ago

Thanks, Dionysian Gnostic!
I like these lines, "vanity and lust rust the chrome
Off a soul. Better to scrape it off
With a sharp knife" It reminds me of something Marilyn Monroe said about herself once..." I'm like one of those paper Chinese dragons they have in their New Year's parade...you know? All fragile looking and colorful on the outside and just kind of empty inside." Sounds like an apropos comparison to the girl in your poem. Good reading.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

1 Month Ago

Love that quote from Marilyn. She was a lot smarter than ppl thought (like Betty Page).

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A powerful and acerbic write deconstructing the personality of this type of woman. The poem flows and is a fine example of free verse in its structure and wise word choice.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

4 Months Ago

Def can be an archetype. A tarot card fleshed out.

Thanks, John. Glad u took the tim.. read more
Great title! your description of the demise of a character like this is potent and the metaphors are perfect! Amazing write!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

4 Months Ago

Thanks, Hebe!
I liked the use of metaphors used to compare the rusted love

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Alessander

4 Months Ago

Thanks for checking it out, Ashwin. Glad u liked it.
She does not know this yet
But she will suffer immensely
I've seen those crazed eyes before
In picasso paintings and McCarthur Park w****s

i felt like the venom ooz out of these lines...

The greatest tragedy is pretending
To understand. Feigning feelings
It's like f*****g a ghost
Drinking a 3 day old coke

very true most of lifes tragedy is due to people pretending to understand and care about the situation and person..

the overall poem feels like a reminder that what goes around comes back.. like the song of justin timberlake - what goes around comes around




Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

4 Months Ago

I don't listen to Timberlake, but I suppose the sentiment is universal.
Thanks, G.
Galadriel

4 Months Ago

:) I guess it is...
this has such bite to it.....3rd and 4th stanzas blew me away...

what goes around comes around....and she will get the karma returned.....
j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

4 Months Ago

Thanks, Jacob.

Yes, karma always returns with a vengeance.


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Alessander
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