The moaner

The moaner

A Poem by Alessander

She knows little of life
Thinks her kisses are ambrosia
But must google ambrosia
Flowers without roots

Petals in the wind
are merely that. Transient
Like her words. One day blooming
The next rotting by sewers

She prefers the falling in love
Over the staying, her fickle
Fantasies of castles
Vanish come dawn

She does not know this yet
But she will suffer immensely
I've seen those crazed eyes before
In Picasso paintings and McCarthur Park w****s

The greatest tragedy is pretending
To understand. Feigning feelings
It's like f*****g a ghost
Downing 3 day old coke

Flat and bitter - once perhaps sweet
But vanity and lust rust the shine
Off a soul. Better to scrape it off
With a serrated knife, corroded love





© 2018 Alessander



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I like these lines, "vanity and lust rust the chrome
Off a soul. Better to scrape it off
With a sharp knife" It reminds me of something Marilyn Monroe said about herself once..." I'm like one of those paper Chinese dragons they have in their New Year's parade...you know? All fragile looking and colorful on the outside and just kind of empty inside." Sounds like an apropos comparison to the girl in your poem. Good reading.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

9 Months Ago

Love that quote from Marilyn. She was a lot smarter than ppl thought (like Betty Page).

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Dang, you painted a clear picture. I really like this piece!
It's very well balanced, I dig the tension it creates.

"My one piece of constructive feedback is the flow at the end of,
Empty and bitter - once perhaps sweet
But vanity and lust rust the shine
Off a soul."

The rhythm of "and lust rust the shine" seems a bit off. Other than that excellent writing!
XO



Posted 2 Months Ago


There is much residing in these lines. Well crafted.

Posted 2 Months Ago


'The greatest tragedy is pretending
To understand.'
Couldn't have said this better myself. I think we as humans are more hypocrites than we let on and perhaps that is in accordance to our wish of blending in with this world and the people. 'Feigning feelings' seems like a slap to me, having done this so often :x
Your words here are very powerful and speak to me on a far greater level. I think this is your best piece I've so far read.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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My works are based off my real thoughts and experiences. Please allow yourself to truly experience and relate to them!
I appreciate the contrast from petal soft to a serrated knife scraping the residue from the corners of some hopeful dreamers eyes. I also appreciate the perspective...a guarded observer sucking lemon with a smile. Truth hurts, they said.


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

2 Months Ago

Thank you for your heartfelt review.
I had a lover once...narcissistic ...cold steel eyes that caught a blue haze when he came....skin deep ...Just as you explained it...like f*****g a ghost..This is real and raw..I love your relevance! Thanks for the share.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

2 Months Ago

Unfortunately, yes, might be universal experience.

Thanks, Queenie.
sublimely crafted- enjoyed your thoughts , melikes my friend!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


cheers - recherche

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

2 Months Ago

Thanks! Appreciate the read.
"the greatest tragedy is pretending to understand". I've been there my friend. We all have once or twice. Trying to get someone to listen to us when their listening is somewhere else.////great line..dana

Posted 5 Months Ago


Nice peace brother I can relate lol..
It's like f*****g a ghost
Drinking 3 day old coke
Love it!
Checkout my page ..peace

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

If you can 't break through the shell of a troubled woman she will more than likely break you instead.
And even if you do what you find is not always worth the trouble. I liked this. So many great lines that just bleed bitterness.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Alessander

5 Months Ago

Wise words. Like waves crashing off jagged cliffs.

Thxs for reading and reflecting.
wow...this sure packs a punch, very well expressed :) x

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alessander

5 Months Ago

Thanks, Tina.
Maybe I too am becoming empty and bitter lol

Nice meeting you, n.. read more
Tina Louise

5 Months Ago

I know that feeling, nice to meet you too :) x

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