I Imagined This Also

I Imagined This Also

A Story by Alexa Apothic Red

I also imagined that we were playing music together.. on stage.. performing, but it was only a duet of sorts, and there was no audience. Chemistry that singed the stage before we stepped upon it. Flames that lapped at our heels but we didn't care. There was a fire. None could contain. It could only burn and ignite the whole place...

I was singing in front. You played guitar to my right. We could each admire what fit together so tight.. was it harmonies or a sound or the words.. whatever it was, it was so good.

The collision of music matched the collision of us, and we could not take it anymore-you'd had enough. Your guitar was cast off like a wayward beggar. As you dropped your pick, pulled my lips to yours so eager. My face in your hands, my resolve melted away-I had to have you too, what the f**k anyway...

© 2018 Alexa Apothic Red



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I'm simply going to go ahead and say this: #2 is better than #1. Not that #1 was bad, but it kind of lacked essence of an arc, if you get what I mean - the story was hard to follow at certain moments. #2 did well to really set the scene, and then take off (if you're going to write more of these, better to merge them all as one for one great dramatic monologue.....for #1, if tweaked, could with this and whichever more you end up writing, all could make one heck of a dramatic monologue).

This little vignette is fluid, it's grand, right down to the last line. And I'm not particularly a fan of expletives in writing (I find they tend to undermine the power and charm of the piece), but that expletive at the end added some humour, and for that I say, it's well placed, and a nice touch to the piece. The dreamlike movement of this story really tugs at the imagination and pulls the readers in to move to the rhythm of this music that you're playing, which in itself can symbolize so many things. So in the end, you make the readers think about what they had just experienced and what it all meant! Absolutely fantastic! Well done!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

9 Months Ago

my pleasure.
Alexa Apothic Red

9 Months Ago

Oh and once again, you know I have similar opinions about expletives... maybe I could tone this one .. read more
emipoemi

9 Months Ago

kind of why the expletive works...it's an out of the blue sentiment that adds a bit of humour. Your .. read more



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I'm simply going to go ahead and say this: #2 is better than #1. Not that #1 was bad, but it kind of lacked essence of an arc, if you get what I mean - the story was hard to follow at certain moments. #2 did well to really set the scene, and then take off (if you're going to write more of these, better to merge them all as one for one great dramatic monologue.....for #1, if tweaked, could with this and whichever more you end up writing, all could make one heck of a dramatic monologue).

This little vignette is fluid, it's grand, right down to the last line. And I'm not particularly a fan of expletives in writing (I find they tend to undermine the power and charm of the piece), but that expletive at the end added some humour, and for that I say, it's well placed, and a nice touch to the piece. The dreamlike movement of this story really tugs at the imagination and pulls the readers in to move to the rhythm of this music that you're playing, which in itself can symbolize so many things. So in the end, you make the readers think about what they had just experienced and what it all meant! Absolutely fantastic! Well done!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

9 Months Ago

my pleasure.
Alexa Apothic Red

9 Months Ago

Oh and once again, you know I have similar opinions about expletives... maybe I could tone this one .. read more
emipoemi

9 Months Ago

kind of why the expletive works...it's an out of the blue sentiment that adds a bit of humour. Your .. read more

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Added on February 23, 2018
Last Updated on February 24, 2018
Tags: Music, musicians, stage, passion, lust, romance, love, fantasy, duet, singer, guitar, kiss

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Alexa Apothic Red
Alexa Apothic Red

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I am very passionate in life and in writing. I am also a singer and songwriter. Swim in my words, take up residence in my mind... Inspire me, and I hope to do the same for you... I thrive on creati.. more..

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