Empty Staircase

 

So many mixed emotions

Bubbling underneath

Uninterrupted notions

Monsters gnash their teeth

 

I feel like crying deep inside

But tears no problems solve

This confusion will subside

Only when events resolve

 

Events resolve only when

Subside will this confusion

No tears solve problems but

Deep inside like crying I feel

 

Their teeth monsters gnash

Notions uninterrupted

Underneath bubbling

Emotions, many so mixed

Reviews

[Alexander W. Quinn]

Nifty! I love the little turn on the words between the 2nd and 3rd stanzas: >>>This confusion will subside / Only when events resolve / Events resolve only when / Subside will this confusion

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

Several things, and I am going to be very blunt here in what i think. Don't take what I say to heart, poetry needn't mean anything or need approval from anyone but the writer.

The way you have phrased some of these lines really breaks up the flow of the poem. It sounds good, but the reader might trip over the words easily. The title in no way (that I can see, at least) reflects the poem that you have written. The images are lost in the wording.

sorry for being brutal, but remember, no one has to like it but you :) best of luck