You said you loved me

my boyfriend broke up with me: This is a new edit, i was advised to put for feeling and detail into it, I hope I did it :)

you said you loved me

you promised me things

like undying love n marriage

you made my heart sing

 

you made me feel special

but all you wanted was sex

you said if I did this or that

forever you will be blessed

 

i let you take me to bed

i let you be my first

but i was just another tramp

became just your jizz in the dirt

 

you made me do things

that made me feel dirty

you said you loved me foever

you said "you mean the world to me"

 

But you didnt mean it

the pain oh so cold

you left me for another

girl more experienced an old

 

now your with someone else

said she was better than me

you took my heart my soul

and my virginity

 

So, F**k you my Darling

I hope that you die

I let you have me completely

now all I do is cry

 

You were never worth it

you just wanted some girl

to be like a dish rag

wiping up your sweet soil

 

You hurt me Im crying

For my innocence lost

I was 13 you were 21

Was it worth all the cost

 

I hate you Ur nasty

I should have caught it much sooner

You were my Boyfriend, my molester

and me, just a bonner

 

I hate you Dave!!!!!!!!!

 

Reviews

[Ashley]

for 13 yrs old, this poem is very good. you can improve your writing by more experience. you wrote, "you promised me things" well what things are you talking about? to the reader, its a little bit confusing. so next time, add more detail into your writing.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh wow, you tugged my heart into this as you poured your heart into this. Very real, and sad. Love how you worded this part:
"you just wanted some girl
to be like a dish rag"
Hugs to you. Many boys say the same old lines to girls. When you find one that has something different to say that no other has said yet, then that is when it should be better, but even then, heck... awful how it all is and played.

[No name]

This was a sad story for no one should be taken advantage of, I can't relate but I feel for you. Realize you don't need anyone to feel happy or complete. Nice write.

[Thea]

Wow! I think you really poured some powerful emotions in here especially the wrath you have for your boyfriend...It really hurts a lot being treated like that...When I was reading this, I was like, "What the hell is with this guy treating a girl like that? That's so unjust!"...Anyway, I like how the poem strongly emphasizes the idea...Great work!
100/100!
:)))

[i-love-you-boo♥]

This is really good=) but really sad

[screamin'ian]

Omg! You're not 13, are you? Well, hard lesson learned... I hope. Your writing is raw, being so new. Maybe you should try it without the rhyming. Raw emotion and strong subject matter like this is diminished by trying to rhyme.
Otherwise, I like the honesty here. :)

[Gomer LePoet]

Wow! this is very intense and certainly spoken from the broken heart. It is likely good that you were able to put these thoughts, these feelings down on a piece of paper, a screen, your heart chart. Hopefully this will be your last broken heart, but I'm afraid that more will come, and probably you will give a few too.

[Geoff Hubbard]

13 you dont need anyone to be happy. make yourself happy nd then find someone to share your happiness.

[Secret Lullaby]

wow..is all i cans say....i can totally relate to this though....i fell for an older guy but all i got was a broken heart...and a mistake that i have 2 live with...but great poem

[Alana McGuire]

You really got your feeling for Dave out well in this piece. No girl, or guy for that matter, should be treated this way. You're way too young to be used for things like that. You're a young lady and you deserve to find a Prince Charming who will sweep you off your feet and and treat you like the princess you definitely are.
DO NOT settle. Wait for the guy who would rather talk to you for hours instead of getting you naked for a few minutes.
And remember, you DESERVE to be treated with RESPECT. :)

[Ashley]

better job